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    dots Submission Name: suicide note #99dots
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    Author: _Dancing_Alone_
    ASL Info:    14/f/and...MARS.
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 91/96/36
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 246
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1457



    Description:
       i really wrote this for no specific person.
    just a little suicide note for myself when 'i need one.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotssuicide note #99dots
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    ok,
    i know you've heard me say this before.
    i relize i've promised it all in my notes.
    but this time i mean it.
    this time im sure.
    that i will finally leave you,once & for all.

    You think that im lying.
    and you know that youre certain.
    but i've seen how you act.
    all my notes,you misinterpret.

    this is my note,
    saying how i'll die tonght.
    but dont you think its weird,
    how im not really describing it?


    its all because of you.
    its because you didnt take my other notes seriously.
    so,tomorrow when i wont wake,
    you'll say i gave no warning.
    "what a big mistake i made"


    BUT I DID GIVE WARNINGS!
    I GAVE SIGNS!
    I GUESS NOONE CARED WHAT HAPPEND TO MY LIFE...


    & so now you'll all suffer,
    now you'l all grieve.
    Cause my 98 suicide notes,
    weren't all they were cracked up to be.


    & tonight i WILL die!
    No,really i will!
    I dont need help,
    cause i'll do it all by myself.

    >^>^>^>^_______________________
    ___________________________________
    _______________________________________

    well,there goes my life line......









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      Someone who promised suicide on 98 notes, and finally did it on lucky 99. They looked on the irony of it all while writing it, something that made me laugh. I don't know why someone thought it should have rhyming or pattern. It's a note, put into a poem. The verses were probably even not needed, except free verse probably wouldn't be quite right for this. Of course the suject is not original, it's something that will happen over and over and over. Anger and sorrow, venting and capping. For this subject that is a horrible thing to bring up. It doesn't really matter. Nice picture again, and you had some typos, though I don't think that really matters either.
    It makes me think, reminisce. It sounds familiar, in all its words. You know thinking back, I don't think I've ever been really angry, just sad or in pain, sometimes hollow, giddy, and happy. That's probably what the poem really reminds me of.
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by Red_reaper | [ Reply to This ]
      i dont agree with hybrid on this one. i agree that it aws very very dark, and it actually scared me in a way. i got chills. nice work tho

    Much Love,
    Eralyn
    | Posted on 2005-12-04 00:00:00 | by xmangaXfreakx | [ Reply to This ]
      i disagree with EEKS...i didnt like it, and i have a few reasons...first, before i do, make sure that if u do feel like this u get some help...never si good...and dont do it for attention, which this poem reminds me of...onto the poem...i liked how dark it was, event hough it was "emo"...however, it is a subject extremely overdone, and especially in this style...it wasn't "unique"...also, like too many other people, ur rhyming seems a bit forced at times, and u break pattern too much.
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting. i must admit im intrigued. i always wonder about things like this because i wonder whether or not the people are sincere or if its just expression. hope you dont die cause i love your poetry.
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]



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