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    dots Submission Name: My Antidotedots

    Author: poetry chica
    ASL Info:    17/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 93/98/34
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       my boyfriend punched his door in and i told him not to and he said that i have my razors and rubberbands and he has his door but i don't need them anymore i havn't used them in a while because all i really need is him he is truly my antidote

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    dotsMy Antidotedots

    You think i need my razors?
    You think i need my rubberbands?
    Well, you are wrong
    All I need is you

    You are my glass of water in a desert
    An umbrella in the rain
    The one to whom i turn to
    To take away my pain

    Your kisses take away my fears
    The way you hold me in your arms
    And wipe away my tears
    You are my antidote

    Without you i would die
    The poison running through my veins
    What poison you ask?
    The poison of my pain

    Submitted on 2005-12-03 19:38:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      why oh why do u rhyme in every part except for the first? And why is the rhyming scheme so scewed? Wrong, wrong, wrong...all wrong...plus, the message was too cliché...although, i give u a big thumbs up on the imagery
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]

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