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    dots Submission Name: Silent Reality, Silent Liesdots
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    Author: PsychoBabble214
    ASL Info:    18/female
    Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 103/109/29
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 931
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    Description:
       just some feelings i wrote down after one of our shows of Oliver! the musical... just tell me what you think i guess


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    dotsSilent Reality, Silent Liesdots
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    The fool on stage
    trying to please the crowd
    thoughts fall from end
    but none ever aloud

    be still and breathe harsh
    burn, sweat and tears
    forgotten voice
    silence for all ears

    imaginary reality
    magic begins to breathe
    our lies are truth
    it takes one step to believe

    feed the lions,
    pull out your heart
    display it before you
    become the part

    fancy fool upon the water
    black surface as you dance
    two souls fused into one
    last night, last chance-

    your heartís pounding passion
    time begins to slow
    souls tear in two,
    is it really just a show?








    Submitted on 2005-12-03 23:52:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this. It makes your blood run cold when you reach the end. I loved this stanza:

    feed the lions,
    pull out your heart
    display it before you
    become the part

    That's what every damn drama teacher tells you. It is truthful, but it gets annoying after awhile. After hearing it fifty million times... But, you used it simply, shortly and sweetly.

    This was straight to the point. Getting so involved with a character you truly do become the character. You feel what they feel, see what they see and live how they do.

    Kickass job!

    Sammy
    | Posted on 2005-12-29 00:00:00 | by Raven_TheWolf | [ Reply to This ]


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