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    dots Submission Name: Anger & Ragedots

    Author: C. Flava
    ASL Info:    19/M/ILLINOIS
    Elite Ratio:    4.75 - 87/117/28
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 822
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       I decided to post more violent writes then the sweet and loving ones I've been writting, hope you enjoy reading it as much as I did writting it lol. 1 Love

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    dotsAnger & Ragedots

    Anger and Rage
    Is all I feel
    Not even morphine
    Can make me chill

    What you did
    Was trifflin & wrong
    Kinda like Eminems song
    The one where he's throwing up and shit
    Yeah thats how you make me feel SICK!

    You know what bitch
    We're Fucking done
    Now kiss the barrel of my gun.

    Submitted on 2005-12-04 00:14:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well, I don't really dig listening to “Eminen” and I wouldn’t have to if it weren't for my nasty little demons like brothers. As to this write I kind of concur with what Danny brings up about adding more ideas and making a song about it.
    With regards to the title I'd say that you should make up something more appealing coz the one you chose is too simple and austere.

    Personally I didn't really like the message ... I guess I like expressing anger in a subtler way ... but to each their own.

    Good Luck,


    | Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by Ethan Brody | [ Reply to This ]
      As much as i hate to admit it, i quite liked the writing style here, i personally listen to a bit of Eminem and this wouldn't at all sound unlike something he'd spout off in one of his many raps. My advice to you would be, take what you have here, add a few more stanzas and post it as a song. You've managed to pick words that naturally sound like a rap and as reading the tune just seems to play in your head.
    | Posted on 2005-12-04 00:00:00 | by corruptedspirit | [ Reply to This ]

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