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    dots Submission Name: Phoenix Dyingdots
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    Author: MyHeart2Yours
    ASL Info:    18.female.Pennsylavnia
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 96/112/42
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 189
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 777



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    dotsPhoenix Dyingdots
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    Downcast eyes of a stranger walking alone in the world,
    they don’t know who he is,
    much less do they care.
    He could show them his face, look directly into their eyes,
    but met only with black,
    For you see,
    He has no soul, no light, no image behind the empty spaces where eyes should be
    as if though life has taken all it’s got out on him
    Burst into flames,
    rise from the ground,
    Like a Phoenix relinquishing its freedom
    Watching death
    Watching birth
    He wonders through the hearts of the unwilling
    With empty spaces, where their hopes should be
    everything goes black,
    as the hearts begin to burn
    With Phoenix dying
    and Phoenix rising




    Submitted on 2005-12-04 01:34:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a great poem! I love how much imagery is in it.
    The way that you wrote about a Phoenix dying and Phoenix rising reminds me of Harry Potter. Heh.
    My favorite part of this poem was:
    He could show them his face, look directly into their eyes,
    but met only with black,
    For you see,
    He has no soul, no light, no image behind the empty spaces where eyes should be
    as if though life has taken all it’s got out on him

    Keep up the good work!

    -Shadow
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by Lavender | [ Reply to This ]
      i like how u used the phoenix in comparasin to a person
    im getting a good image in my head with this

    Darkness of the Grim Draco
    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great poem and I LOVE how much imagery you had. This poem was amazing. I love this part the most though:
    Like a Phoenix relinquishing its freedom
    Watching death
    Watching birth
    He wonders through the hearts of the unwilling
    With empty spaces, where their hopes should be
    | Posted on 2005-12-04 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]



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