... I'm so confused... I'll have to read this again, but the abstractness of it is what makes it so endearing. I love it. The strangeness if the narrative is a cool concept, and waay off the mainstream. I would have phrased the second and last stanzas differently, but that's just me. I'm liking your stuff a lot, and I'll check back periodically. Watch for my and I'll watch for you . Wishing for more, ~Brian
well, this is quite crazy! I like it... the rhyming is a bit unnatural and I found myself struggling with it, but I think after a few read-throughs it would be fine. Is this a riddle or what?!? I'm intrigued.. tell me more, tell me more!
i like this, man...sounds like my kind of writing. people have no patience when it comes for abstract story telling, and they don't like it when they have to fiugre stuff out. Like why someone would be in their sink. And then they gotta deal with it, and [censored], and its just too complicated and poetic...Love it. My fave line..."he'll do the murder/ Fix me yourself". wow! ~leper m