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    dots Submission Name: Unlike Himselfdots
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    Author: UnPerfect
    ASL Info:    14/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 168/131/37
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsUnlike Himselfdots
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    "I spit upon you"
    the hatred grew
    within his usually deep, brown eyes
    that are now
    so bloodshot
    my tears flooded the area
    I felt I was to drown
    I yelled and yelled
    then wrestled him to the ground
    the vicious kicking
    and violent words
    were all I found
    as I held him down
    "I hate you"
    the words came to ME
    in a voice so strange
    I surely did not want to see
    I did not want to look
    at his face
    so terrifying
    fighting his way through it
    he was taken away
    by two loved ones
    and he was prayed to
    so dearly
    after that
    the whole thing was through
    we did not speak of it
    and he did not know
    he did not remember
    for at that moment
    he was not himself




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      Hey is this about me? You know I dont remember any of it.
    | Posted on 2007-02-18 00:00:00 | by Uthmaan | [ Reply to This ]
      rabi this is so awsome i mean not what happened just that u can write gurl man i wish i had that kind of talent. but then again that thing it really waz scary i mean i never saw him like that before
    | Posted on 2006-01-14 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      You weaved some really great images in this poem. It has kind of a mysterious air to it. It leaves me wondering who he is and why he was acting unlike himself. You really drew me in with this poem and left me wanting more. Very nice job. I enjoyed this.
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by Amanda Bee | [ Reply to This ]
      cooooooo exorsisim
    that rox
    need me to exorcise neybody im in da mood
    i jus read ibn tameeyas esay on the jinn
    very interesting


    yo i luv this poem its awsome the way u delt wit it and everthing
    damn it was good


    Darkness of the Grim Draco
    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]
      This is one of the few rare poems I have come across that contains the perfect grammar. It vividly depicts the feelings of the moment; I can put myself into the scene. This poem does not feel fabricated because of its simplicity; I have a feeling that it's either a true one or inspired by a true story. The descriptions are great also. And the ending is mysterious. To sum it up, I really enjoyed reading it.
    | Posted on 2005-12-04 00:00:00 | by fading37embers | [ Reply to This ]


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