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    dots Submission Name: The Tolerance of Truthdots
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    Author: siroez
    ASL Info:    22/Male/WV
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 68/67/32
    Words: 240
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 219
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    Description:
       This poem is about searching for truth. mainly spiritual truth (i spiritual enlightenment, self-realization, afterlife) this poem is pretty old as well, it used to be a masterpiece in my collection simply because of its great meaning. and a lil bit of that flow as well...but not so much any more.

    most feedback appriciated. comment if you read it and lemme know what you think. PLEASE.


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    dotsThe Tolerance of Truthdots
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    the tolerance of truth

    the glimmer, a slight twinkle
    here and of course so unreachable
    compared to a star in the night sky
    so close but still so very far
    desire; burning, throbbing, pushing
    lessons learned and always preached
    moving me on, to pick a star
    from the sky and put it my pocket
    ill grow, and flourish, and shine
    somehow ill always be a little empty
    because not everything can be mine
    as my path unfurls infront of me
    unrolls in its tedious glory
    i see it leads to a beautifull place
    bright with a maginificant shine
    though i cant see it i still proceed forward
    footprints allow me to trace my path through time
    as i keep my steady forward pace
    i have to much desire to lose this race
    stubborn, yes i know i am
    this seagoat moves for no unworthy man
    though i will assist all i can
    i still wish to be prosperous on this land
    sacrifices to make and stones to step over
    a lesson once learned, proved to be fact
    now a regulation, a standard
    trace the footprints further back
    like the cord to the wall
    it proves you cant be two places at once
    those would be: here and so very far
    you can only travel forwards
    in a unchangable unstoppable direction
    that brings you to the end of the road
    which beholds the glorified beauty of truth




    Submitted on 2005-12-04 12:38:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Intriguing lyrics. How deep does the search for truth go? Is the truth really that there isn't one person alive who can speak the answer because we're all controlled by a darker side of ourselves, a ego-maniacal subconscious with enough influence to lie, decieve and even threaten our cognizance so that by the time we consciously try to spread the truth to another, it has become tainted by our motives and desires before it even passes across our lips? Funny. The very kind of ironic truth that only makes things worse the more you try to track it down. Lyrics like that cause funny reactions. Some people will laugh- they understand it the most, but refuse to accept it at all. The people who read it and smile, they're probably the kind of people we need more of in life. Truth would be so much more valuable when it's recognized from experience without being exploited.
    Your lyrics have a strong foundation. To see the minor connections between the nothings and the somethings, that's where you're lyrics are headed. And could keep going for a long time if you let them.
    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by ghostknight | [ Reply to This ]
      great write. the search for truth is VERY hard. im not sure that we will ever find it. its a very noble cause, though. i love your imagery throughout the entire piece. at first i thought it was about the beginnings of winter and the first snow.

    the glimmer, a slight twinkle
    here and of course so unreachable

    that made me think of winter. but then as you read through it becomes very clear. great write, though. thanks.
    | Posted on 2005-12-04 00:00:00 | by brokenroses | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the concept of this write. The search for truth. That's a journey we'll be on till the end of time, I suppose. You were right in that we will always have a bit of emptiness in us. And as you say, maybe at the end, we will discover what goes there?
    This was interesting.
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-12-04 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was cool...I liked the meaning...the flow is a bit off in a few places but that's ok cause this was still a pretty good write. I don't know why more people haven't commented yet...it was well worth the read. I really like the intention here...alot of truth. lol overall good write.keep writing.
    peace
    | Posted on 2005-12-04 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm the truth I once read a book call the truth book, it was blue and held many ans to be true. As we grow older we become more independent. There fore rellying on our own experience. To guide us along. Mostly that is because of all the let downs we have had along the way . It's just easier to say. I give up on this, for all I see is lies. Never give up, Keep an open mind like that of a child. You never know when you might open the door and there it is.


    Sincerly Gannondalf aka Big Bear
    | Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by Gannondalf | [ Reply to This ]



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