Description: Dedicated to my Pastor of the church, I just moved away from...
My Pastor -------------------------------------------
My Pastor has served alot of years
For us has wept a load of tears
Laboring and working very hard
For our soul, he keeps his guard
Watching over his flock everyday
Praying that not one will go astray
This man knees gently beside his bed
Nightly asks God for us to be spirit led
Seeks God with fasting and prayer
To keep us out of the devils lair
Praying to the Lord with all his might
That his flock will not give up the fight
Keeping faith this battle we will win
Victory and forgiveness over all our sins
The words you choose seem a little stock, and many of the sentences are distorted to fit a rhyme scheme. This isn't always a bad thing if something important needs to be said, it just seems like you are filling the empty space with words, and not so much feeling. Overall I give it a 3/5 because there is no such thing as a bad poem.
This is really beautiful You Thanking your pastor For all the love and kindness he has brought you and numerous others I hope you mail him a copy of this Im sure this would warm his Heart God Bless Your Friend Ron
And Thank You for your recent comments As always I truly enjoy hearing from you God Bless
This is a lovely dedication to your pastor. I am sure he would be so ever appreciative of such a warm and lovely poem about him. This poem is very well written and expressed with admiration and sincerity. There are those in our lives who really make a huge impact and a big difference, and I can tell that this man is one of those to you. Just by reading this I can tell he must be a wonderful man and considering you have said that you have moved away, I can imagine you will miss him. Lovely poem Linda! Take care.
I love any piece dedicated to another and this was a very fitting and appreciative poem for a friend and your encouraging pastor. I like that you show that the pastor does it not for himself but for the others and that is his life - you are very encouraging and thankful and I'm sure he appreciates you too! Love,Peace,Joy~Know,Experience,BE~~~ tif
Change knees to kneel, and the last word sins to sin and you will have the perfect "Pastor Appreciation" day reading. Wonderful idea to remember him in poetry, its as good as any picture and twice as personal. I also have picked up on the fact that You and Sandra might be sisters and keep in touch in the forum, THATS wonderful!
I think this is a nice tribute to the man and I think you put a lot of feeling and thought into this poem. I hope you are liking your new home and meeting lots of new friends. I also hope you had a better weekend than I did. I enjoyed read'n this and thanks for sharing... !doc`
As usual Linda, your words are heartfelt, true and very meaningful. It is really refreshing to read a tribute to these people who are very often 'forgotten hero's'. The work they do is worth more than anything money could ever buy.
A very lovely and thoughtful write with your usual style and flow.
The details in this poem are excellent - I can get a feeling of what kind of a person your Pastor is even though I have never met him. The rhyming scheme is consistent and the best thing about it is that the rhymes don't feel forced - they end the sentences naturally and make sense. Overall, this is a good poem, definitely one to store a memory.
Let me be the first to comment, since I know this man well This is a lovely and heartwarming tribute to a wonderfiul man, and Pastor. You showed your respect and love for him, and I know he'd feel honored by this, if he should read it.