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    dots Submission Name: A willed heart.dots
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    Author: snufthepunk28
    ASL Info:    21/f/ak
    Elite Ratio:    4.5 - 244/178/68
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       This is a poem/vent i wrote as renforcement to my mind. renforcing that love is a choice even in the smalest of relationships.


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    dotsA willed heart.dots
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    "A waterfall covers these softly dripping tears. A willed heart beats."
    I willed my heart to beat, even though it brakes.
    I willed my heart to beat untill everything is pumed out.
    The casing of my heart even may crack and dry out tell it has long since become dust.
    My mind will still will for the heart to beat.
    For it is a better way for me to learn to live.
    When my mind can not force it to will... then may God cradle me in his shadows.




    Submitted on 2005-12-05 03:58:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Insightful indeed... I think we have all found ourselves feeling like we have been given more than we can handle... all it takes really is an unpaid electric bill and a broken heart and we feel like it is the end of the world. It doesn't take much anymore. You have a way of reaching the emotions of your reader, that I haven't seen on ES in quite some time, nevermind that I have been away for a long time. I have checked out several of your writes, because I like to get a feel for the writer before commenting. It is tough knowing your heart can't stop even though you wish it would... you wish the day would end and take you with it. This is what my song 'My Friend' is about... I think I wrote it for someone else, but it was rather easy, having been exactly where she is now. I have noticed that the end of most of your writing is the most powerful... grippign your reader throughout, then giving one final strong grip on your readers' emotions... the one thing that stands out the most is what we are left with, and that is a plus... You also paint a very vivid picture of that place inside that we all want to give away and protect at the same time. Excellent write.
    | Posted on 2007-05-29 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very strong piece
    You expressed that emotion you hold inside very well
    A very good and Heartfelt Poem
    I really liked this
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please keep in touch!
    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one a lot Felicia. Very strong and powerful piece. A very insightful sense of worth can be drawn out of this. Nice job.
    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem gave me a feeling completely different from the one in your description. As I was reading it, I felt that the heart was beating to live instead of love - I initially thought of it as a struggle before death. The word choices are perfect for expressing whichever ideas you had in mind. I loved reading it. It's touching and tragic and I can definitely feel the emotions involved. Great job!
    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by fading37embers | [ Reply to This ]


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