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    dots Submission Name: Anorexi-Part 2 rewrittendots

    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAnorexi-Part 2 rewrittendots

    In an alternative ending
    There was a new beginning.
    Listening to her body’s whisper
    echoing cries of a loved-starved spirit,
    she served herself compassion.

    Flavouring her soul
    with love and true affection
    found deep in her heart,
    rejection stopped.
    Self-mutilation ceased.
    Unpeeling layers
    and pouring out pungent grief,
    released an appetite for life.
    In a savouring of peace,
    realisation nourished a new recipe for living.

    Anorexia died then
    and out of darkness
    an inner well of light bubbled over
    stirring her into awakening.
    Imbibing the power of her own love
    she thirsted to heal herself.
    Tasting joy,
    she feasted on the wonder of life.

    Make a meal of loving yourself
    Let your body mirror the love in your heart
    Honour your divine spark.
    Grow and glow.
    Shine your light into the hearts of others
    So they too can see their inner light.
    We all have one you know!

    Submitted on 2005-12-05 07:23:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this write but i have to honestly say the First one showed a little more emotion
    I believe you wrote the first one with more feeling on the topic
    That is not to say this was not a good write
    Take Care
    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow well done! This is really good, portraying the ugliness of anorexia but still giveing so much hope..i suffered with anorexia and know all too well the affects from the insidious disease...this would be a great piece for those in clinics recovering...if this is about you i am very pleased to hear of another that has overcome the illness..stormy
    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]

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