Description: I wrote this one about a year ago. I was thinking about everything that happened that week. I was thinking about doing my usual to get rid of the pain, but instead I wrote this poem. the " your plea" part refers to a friend of mine that found out my secret: i cut: and they begged me not to do it any more. Don't know if there is much else to tell you. Any comment is good.
Blade -------------------------------------------
It's been a month, since I've cut myself
I put the blade on its shelf
I don't feel the need to cut
It seems I'm cured but
Everyonce in a while I get the need
But then I remember your plea
So, I put the blade back on its shelf
That way I can't cut myself
hey kittys18, That was very expressionative, in my opinion. There was a message clearly sent through that and overcoming something like cutting is hard. I know through many times, I have had personal experiences with subjects of this matter and others. I love how simple, yet emotional it is. It brings back old memories to me, and I was wondering if you have stopped to this day? Not that it is my business, I was just kind of wondering because it is very hard sometimes to overcome the desire to cut. Anyways on a better note, the set up was well done and I personally couldn't find anything to complain about here. My favorite stanza is as follows:
"Everyonce in a while I get the need But then I remember your plea"
Um, i really can't relate about the cuttting thing, even though i've written poems about it myself. Cutting relates to depression, though and that's the way I related. What youre trying to say gets across, but not in the subtlest of manners. This isnt exactly my type of poem, but I like it as a new experience...
This was a good write. It had a nice flow and the rhyming was good. I know how it feels cuz sometimes I get the need to do something bad to myself, but then I think of how my family and friends would feel, so I don't do it, no matter how much I want to. Great write, keep up the good work.
Submission Name: Blade
