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    dots Submission Name: Suicidedots
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    Author: Coffee_Dreamer
    ASL Info:    18/f/CO
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 9/20/9
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       People who live in self pity and destruction....good gravy how can you live in such stupidity? Look around you there IS someone who has it worse than you....i know being a person in a free world with little or no persecution is hard. is it really worth hurting the loved ones you so carelessly abuse with self mutilation and emotional recklessness, to commit such a tedious deed like suicide??? to end the talent and joy you could of had???...life is bumpy get over it.


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    dotsSuicidedots
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    Sitting there in pity
    Hoping for some love
    Walking around the city
    Missing all the signs above
    Individual looks
    Stepping inside a hall
    All around the room closed books
    Down there a call
    Heart is beating
    Feeling misplaced
    Soul is bleeding
    Outstanding, disgraced
    Not caring about thoughts
    Self mutilation
    Hopes of not getting caught
    A mind discovering devastation
    The heart ache and disdain
    The yearning for something more
    All the pain
    Lying on the cold hard floor
    Canít take it
    Not strong enough
    Taking a blanket
    Thinking so tough
    Forgetting the loved ones leaving behind
    The friends that really care
    To be so blind
    The blood flows from the tear
    An open window
    Talent flushed
    Too late now, the blood and water flow
    The silence is shushed
    Too naÔve to see
    To open the eye
    The happiness that could be
    The soul will never fly
    Why be so pessimistic?
    The stupidity of suicide
    Canít be optimistic
    Much rather of died




    Submitted on 2005-12-05 16:11:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      tresure the love you receive

    when a friend is in trouble don't annoy him or her by asking if there is anything you can do.
    think of something and do it
    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow you post a lot lol but they are good posts, not just some random stuff thrown together. This piece has a lot of purpose and meaning to it. For someone who has never been through suicidal thoughts, you sure write about it well. Awesome!

    Much Love,
    Eralyn
    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by xmangaXfreakx | [ Reply to This ]


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