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    dots Submission Name: Blinding Visiondots

    Author: particularshard
    ASL Info:    23/m/DC
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 1159/1392/363
    Words: 309
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1282
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    dotsBlinding Visiondots

    Here comes the new edition -
    Pop the spot like hot fission
    With spectacular rhymes timed like mid-air, collisions,
    Eazy Blinding Vision -
    Point-one in a million,
    Young son is done grillin,
    About to break the beat in this hiphop cotillion
    Its almost 2006 and time to make a killin
    Hail the villain!
    Or else I'll have your bluffed guts spillin
    So the whole world can see how you got, raspberry fillin -
    I'm chillin right up until the point you niggas got me illin!
    A knife in my hand's
    a life in my hand
    Which is the way that you end up -
    Right in the sand
    Spend a, night in my land -
    I doubt you'll see the sun -
    I'm the Stillborn,
    The Young Bourbon King
    The Unrepentant One -
    You got rented guns,
    And year old ammo
    I'm camped out at your apartment complex in camo
    First blood like Rambo
    Chew you like a hambone
    Fool you flip me off in your dreams -
    You'll find your hand gone
    I'm the big dog
    Fuck a big chain -
    I get all the shine I need off my big brain -
    You say i'm crazy like I been sane,
    I chop off your head and call it wig rain!
    You just a bitch main's shit stain!
    I'm scarier than dick pain
    After you stuck your dick in that chick who eats monkey brains -
    Cuz yo I got chunky Hane's,
    Nuts like Coco-
    When they hear im in the spot
    They call cops like Robo -
    I'm Bmore like Gogo
    Nat'l guard won't even let me in D.C. -
    I'm loco!
    Terror threat level red? -
    That's my promo!
    Five senators dead because of lies that they said
    And Jenna Bush push the whip
    While Barbara Bush give me head!

    Submitted on 2005-12-05 18:15:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Woah I could never be able to write this... It sounds like it was a hard piece to write. But then hey it might be easy for you.. So much rhyming... AMAZING
    I really enjoyed thhis. You did an excellent job with it. I really didn't see anything wrong with it..
    Good Job
    Hopefully I will check out more of your writes
    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      Foolishy fien fo what i keep in my right hand,
    and never look to the left,
    neva knowin i got ya last breath,
    The wise wept,
    at my birth,
    was sealed the destruction of earth,
    unleashed a curse,
    a killa with no heart,
    tearin lives apart,
    with smiles or bullets,
    neva yell just pull it,
    and put it ta ya dome,
    love it
    like my hoes
    got bytches that swallow
    so [censored] all ya niggas that spit
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by Atrip187 | [ Reply to This ]

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