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    dots Submission Name: my musicdots
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    Author: morriscool4
    ASL Info:    18/m/Pa
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 46/45/22
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 762
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 704



    Description:
       its nothing great, but tell me what u think, just threw it together, some tiems it works out some times it dont,
    -phil-


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    dotsmy musicdots
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    head baning to the music
    of lifes heavenly flow
    this is my song
    these are my words
    stand back and watch me go


    just for a seckond there
    put your finger on your neck
    fell the pulse of your heart
    feel your hearts beat per seck.
    now start to jump,
    but keep your finger there,
    you got the base now,
    just add a guitar solo
    and a few chords on the keys
    and there ya go
    all you need is words
    and you got me.


    head baning to the music
    of lifes heavenly flow
    this is my song
    these are my words
    stand back and watch me go




    Submitted on 2005-12-05 18:15:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Have to agree with the one who have written before me, its works like that. The poem also have a good rhytm, it would work fine as song too.
    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by lennox | [ Reply to This ]
      Good poem. lol it sounds like me when I get a song I like. The only real problem was the typo at the beginning where you meant to put banging but instead put baning soooo ya.
    Teh evil bunnies approve >:3

    --Rice--
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    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by Razing_Fire | [ Reply to This ]


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