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    dots Submission Name: THIS IS WHAT HAPPENS NEXT pt 2dots
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    Author: kase
    ASL Info:    19/M/Winnipeg
    Elite Ratio:    2.28 - 79/226/142
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsTHIS IS WHAT HAPPENS NEXT pt 2dots
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    the ray reflected sun shines on the angels who are rotten
    dont forget this is the place where everyone's forgotten
    the metal chains rust and leave rings of blood on slitten wrists
    as good as it got compared to this, this place now seems like bliss

    shadows stand on every corner though nothings there to cast them
    the heart stops beating, the mind stops thinking, and life begins to spasm
    withered feathers that fell from wings have been slowly etched to black
    hopefulness was all we had, but we'll never get that back

    at night the screams just intensify, and the sounds seem to get closer
    strong hearts have reached their limits, even love can develop ulsers
    cover your eyes and sheild your soul, because if not now, youre next
    those endless possibilities have now been torn to fractioned shreds

    our sense of right has turned to wrong and morals into garbage
    though morals are the base of good, everything seems tarnished
    ive seen people who cry blood, and angels chained to crying fixtures
    id gladly go to hell. heaven wasnt like this in the picture




    Submitted on 2005-12-05 21:34:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow.. i really liked this. wow... oh man the imangery well was very vivid too. yeah definately another one of my favs. ... lol... and everything seemed to flow pretty good and overall it seems to be just a well written piece... keep up the good work.. [i think you've gotten me intrigued... i'll definately be reading more into your piece..heheh]

    -m.m-
    | Posted on 2006-10-07 00:00:00 | by MidnightMelody | [ Reply to This ]
      you alwayse have exelent imagry. you are really good although i do like the other one better but i guess thats cuz the first thing you read of someone new is alwase the best to you ya know.

    xoxo
    that girl
    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by sweet sorenity | [ Reply to This ]
      in the begining there was alot of good points.
    They were all well written & brought out. The emotions, raw..
    then at the end.
    It brought it all together.
    Making sense of everything. What it was, why it was that way.
    It explains the title also.
    You brought it all together with one sentance.
    Really well done.

    Going back & reading the piece after that really shed a new light on it also.
    The last part was my favorite- I think because I could see it more. Relate the feelings more.

    It was a well written piece. You did a good job
    ~jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... this is... amazing. I think this is THE best thing I have read on this site. I really loved it. you have great imagery..and.. the whole concept of this is just.. wow. you did an awesome job. I like the first and last parts. I really love the ending. this is so wonderful yet so sad.. I've always thought it strange that something so beautiful could be filled with saddnes...
    | Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]


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