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    dots Submission Name: DREAMdots

    Author: StMichael
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 11/11/5
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 748
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       just dream hammies....dream

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    Help out yourself
    and help out some others.
    If you dont feel like doin it
    act its your sister or mother


    Go out and do it
    Try livin the Dream
    You can choose to be a criminal
    cuz theres room on the streets

    A simple effort
    many need to succeed
    I never said a scrape dont hurt
    and its easy to leave...but

    ever give up
    or ever think about quitin
    Its still people gettin drunk
    so you think that your missin...

    with the old
    and in the the new
    Even the smartest of men
    can turn into a vegetable

    for just a minute or two
    if you were a child
    not a parent
    would you want this for you?

    cause of you think of it
    then of course it could happen
    look at all the silly white boys
    gettin rich off rappin!

    Submitted on 2005-12-05 22:00:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I noticed your entries, weren't getting any love(comments) so I though I might just give you one. This poem/rap/freak of nature as a real sense of want and community, You obviously want people to get their dreams and never give up on them. The line even the smartest man can turn into a vegetable was nice, if you don't use your mind you lose it. But on an overall scale this one gets a 5 outta ten. Might just be that i don't like rap but no offense I got nothing outta this one, maybe I wasn't the intended audience. Thanks for posting.

    Yours Truly,
    | Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by Aruemos | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem. It's original and different. The thing that sticks out the most is your word choice. This is one of the better poems that I have read.

    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by Razing_Fire | [ Reply to This ]

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