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    dots Submission Name: Two Hearts Tied Togetherdots
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    Author: MurphyGirl44
    Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 70/76/25
    Words: 437
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 210
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    dotsTwo Hearts Tied Togetherdots
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    I untie your heart as if it was a porcelain doll’s shoe…
    The laces that were once tied neatly in a bow
    Are now tangled in a knot
    Feelings, memories, and pain make up the tiny strands that are within the laces
    Reaching my hands in I disentangle all that I can grasp
    I tie your heart back into a bow
    But it is far from perfect, not even fully tied…
    That is where I come in, where my laces tie themselves to yours
    Every strand connects to you
    For what would be a porcelain doll without two shoes with two bows
    And a girl who ties her doll’s laces together?




    Submitted on 2005-12-05 22:13:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      What a great idea...what a great image. When two people are truly in love...they are connected...they are tied...they are completely wrapped up in eachother, and when you try untie one you end up unraveling the other. I love it. Great job. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      I saw the title and I just couldn't pass up the chance to read a good love poem for they are my favorite.
    Two hearts tied together, a great concept and a wonderful thing when it happens. I enjoyed read'n your poem and thanks for sharing...
    !doc`
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice write the fact that it was also a refrence to something as simple as tying together string made it fall into place with an iron fist. The last line really called the poem to a brutal halt, ending the poem but leaving the line to repeat itself in my head, I'm not sure if that's what you were going for but that's what it did for me. To let you know once more Kick ass write, I'd give it a 9.0 out of 10.

    Sincerly yours with a bloody kiss,
    Naymless.
    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by Naymless | [ Reply to This ]



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