Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Shattered Spiritdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: dycrain
    ASL Info:    56/F/U.S.A.
    Elite Ratio:    7.33 - 51/54/19
    Words: 366
    Class/Type: Story/Angry
    Total Views: 751
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2892



    Description:
       This was loosely based upon an incident that happened some time back in Compton, Ca.

    However, understand that this torture goes on every day to an animal. It is unfortunate that an animal must be treated this way. When you accept an animal into your family home, please realize you also are accepting the care and not the abuse of this pet. Care for this animal as you would want your own child to have care.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsShattered Spiritdots
    -------------------------------------------


    A glorious creature
    now enters your life
    craving a new friend.
    Love, food, and water
    needed, without fear
    your life he shall defend.

    God's Will, you have this puppy
    adoring and playful
    belief, you must learn to care.
    His grand scheme must be done
    instead, Satan said "NO
    let's give your friend a fierce scare."

    "Fun begins, trickery
    scorn with all your might
    laugh with crazed delight."
    "Become the master
    do as you desire
    give him this hateful fright."

    Over and again, unstopped
    no refrain, rant and rave
    in malevolent fits.
    Out of control, striking
    with forceful raging hate
    smashing him out of his wits.

    Voice, delivering a shrill screech
    pitch so high, it was soundless
    foot driving violent kicks.
    Shattered spirit, blood stained wounds
    this body and soul destroyed
    he now cleanses with painful licks.

    Neck embedded,heavy chainlink
    this thirsty puppy, grows lighter
    food and water has been denied.
    Forced into total submission
    peering upon this sad creature
    amazing cruelty, horrified.

    Once, loving majestic creature
    filled with joy and playfullness
    now, tightly drawn skin and bones.
    So fragile, he cannot fight
    all around, hearing laughter
    demonic sounds, he lies and moans.

    Unbelievably, no bite or growl
    craving, your acceptance and care
    in spite of these torturous ways.
    This powerful desire lingers
    nose touching your hand for kindness
    needing love and affection all days.

    Like rubbish, no longer needed
    high freeway bridge, to discard
    is thrown twenty feet below.
    In icy fear he lies shocked
    paralized, immovable
    praying, hurry, arise and go.

    As evil won this battle
    demonic glee echoes
    cruel acts, a new soul claimed.
    Appalled and mortified
    standing, in sheer horror
    God's creation now is maimed.

    Smell of burning rubber
    Screaming tires, halt
    by a car was hit.
    This frail puppy,now
    bleeding and destroyed
    because you threw a fit.

    Stained cheeks, salty wet
    gushing, hot tears
    causing blurred eyes.
    Then, suddenly
    a new thought formed
    mind now realized.

    More humane
    to die
    then fear.
    Man's hate
    raped life
    death is here.

    Man's
    law
    jail.
    God's
    law
    HELL.


    © (Pending)
    Yvonne Marie Crain
    June 9, 2005




    Submitted on 2005-12-06 10:27:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      well I suppose if one of the people in the previous post would have their way, I would be dead and if your condemnation would actually be something God would apply I too would be bound for hell by an act. understand this, people may not have that level of forgiveness but God is just to forgive any sin but one that is blasphemy of the spirit. in which I do hope in my words here some will begin to understand. now I have had this mood of condemnation before yes but these days there is only one I truly do hate and blame that is me. I am bound for eternal suffering not by any act that I have done more or less because I am unable to forgive myself for an accumulation of deeds that I have done, for those things and for all the hatred I have I will not allow myself to be loved by anything pure or holy. so all the rage you/they may feel it is quite ok, it is good that people like us who do rage and wish ill things do not control the universe. I do give credit to an upright person as I should. and I have bound myself by codes even in personal despair and when an unfortunate soul does something in the way of a good deed it touches my heart.

    this is not a message of hate. some may say I am trying to get people to have compassion for things they normally wouldn’t have compassion for. but to me this is a message for those who may hear that some people do change and many people even in changing, have already put on the shackles of self damnation. so I wish you and other peace and hope for you to attain in your souls something I cannot, that is life and have it be added to you more abundantly. I’m very troubled of who I was in the past and now face the thing I have become. my soul will always be in torment and worst of all confliction because there is always that other darker side waiting.

    ~mike
    | Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      I dont like animals, I dont care for them at all. I see your perspective all in all and understand your point of view. Writing about it I feel is pointless.
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by Black-Wall | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem really got to me bad. But in a good way nonetheless. I have a weakspot for animals and like everybody else said...dogs in particular. It seems like, I could be mad at the entire world...not want anyone to say anything to me, but still be so happy and playful when it comes to my dog. I don't know what they do to me, but I never feel anger towards them. So...the thought of somebody hurting them, sickens me. I mean...who would do it and what would they get out of it? Does it make them feel any better about themselves? But, all in all...I see where your coming from and really side with you on this issue. Keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by PrettyRicki | [ Reply to This ]
      This is absolutly true and I applaude you for your words of anger.
    I myself love animals and dogs are my soft spot. They are forgiving never judging nor
    betraying. I had to put down my best friend not to long ago.
    I hope that the person who tortured this dog and then sent him to his death has payed for it.

    I wrote a piece about Bronx my dog just a little while ago called my best friend.

    I do love this piece and will fav it.

    Respect and Admiration

    Clyde
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      OMG! Reading this one just broke my heart. I have such an enormous love for animals, all animals. They are such precious creatures and it absolutely disgusts me when I hear of abuse to them. It makes me angry beyond belief and I believe that whatever this person has done to hurt the animal, it should be done to them. There are so many sick rotten people in the world and anyone who is heartless enough to abuse animals should be tortured in the same fashion and I believe this completely. This story is very well written and expressed yet horrific and so very sad. Not an enjoyable read for me as it broke my heart but a very sad reality in our world. You did a great job with this most disturbing topic. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    83508

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry