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    dots Submission Name: the second.dots
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    Author: lovefatal
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 22/38/19
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
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    dotsthe second.dots
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    .......if something happens twice it's a trend


    she listens to him sing, smiles, goes back to writing.

    he once said he's never felt alive.

    & she says, "do you feel alive now?"

    he says, "you know i do."

    she gives a sardonic smile, "i thought all thats ever been is now."

    he's across the room but moving over.

    he takes her face in his hands, & she thinks, "my heart is in his hands."

    he says, "i enjoy your mockery, but understand that you're responsible for this."

    she says, "i better go."

    he sighs & puts his forehead against hers, "i hate it when you do that."

    "me too," she mumbles.

    she wants to tell him about her dreams. she wants to tell him she loves him.

    "i'll stay." she says.

    & thats the best she could do.





    Submitted on 2005-12-06 12:54:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I felt like that all the time when I was away from my lover when I had her. Thank you for kinowing my thoughts. When you read my writtings if you don't understand private message me and I will break down each stanza by stanza. Some of my writtings you may need a dictionary to break down the meaning. Have a nice night. Merry Christmas and a happy New Year. I will get drunk for you too.
    | Posted on 2005-12-25 00:00:00 | by B-Gentle | [ Reply to This ]
      damn i used to feel like that all the time... i hated parting ways from a lover... even so, i left and havent seen her in almost 2 years... and i love her even more today than i did then...

    but this is a great write and very true... the only thing i have to say is that it reads too slow and spacey... yeah it may be your own style and thats all, but try to lose some of the extra line breaks and make it into stanzas or something (if you like)... then it will read smoother and make me happier...

    i guess i should have read "the first" first, but i'll go and do that now...

    PEACE and LOVE, greg
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by geherald | [ Reply to This ]
      @___@ Yes.
    It's sad. And cruel. And true.
    When lover's go~
    I'm done being a doofus over here.
    I like your style though, probably just 'cause it's differant.
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]



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