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    dots Submission Name: The Government Loves Youdots
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    Author: kase
    ASL Info:    27, Winnipeg
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 169/398/234
    Words: 232
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1128
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       My first attempt at a political piece


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    dotsThe Government Loves Youdots
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    governments will never close their eyes
    one is shut but the other open wide
    presidents are advertisments that never seem to try
    control the population which never seems to die
    war is simply money disguised
    capture the flag and then consume it dry
    economical growth is fueled by working lives
    the rich sit back while the rest struggle to just get by

    propaganda and the media have always had suspiscious ties
    is hollywood the frontman for all the flakey lies?
    or can any person be misguided by their waves of shallow tides?
    are answers even plausible when the question's hard to find
    seemingly impossible to escape politics that bind
    secrets from the source itself, could break a steady mind
    money into missles, the joys of laughter into cries
    flashing sirens escalate when the souls of people rise

    2 world wars and our battle scars seem fine
    regardless of our victories uncle sam will always whine
    jump aboard the bandwagon and take your sons for the ride
    we'll wait and see if flashing bombs and bullet wounds will start to make us blind
    the sun will set and once it does murder wont be a crime
    bury your sons and husbands too and join the group of widowed wives
    governments have never killed a man just to stay alive
    they send their children blindfolded as they watch the news with pride




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      Stupid ******-******* government...
    | Posted on 2013-10-09 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      I totally agree with your sentiments and it's a pretty good poem as well. The world is nearly ready for us but I should live so long! Thanks for a fine write.

    Donald
    | Posted on 2006-10-18 00:00:00 | by siradrian | [ Reply to This ]
      Shit dude, this is intense. I absolutely loved this line "the sun will set and once it does murder wont be a crime". Very cool. You're right, I loved this piece. I don't know what to say....


    Lia
    | Posted on 2006-05-03 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I had a read as suggested - and I LOVE IT. Puts my attempt at a political piece to shame. This is so deep and raw - very well thought through
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Sugar | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one very much. The government is crap. I got a diffrent writing style and talk about diffrent stuff. check out mine called The War On Drugs. go check it out and see if u agree. I love this line "governments have never killed a man just to stay alive
    they send their children blindfolded as they watch the news with pride."It's so true but they kill incent men by letting crack house be there in big cities. They know where they are . hel everyone does. but they let them stay cause they make so much money off it.
    | Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by DrewDilla | [ Reply to This ]
      Well,here's the comment I promised,I'm just sooo sorry that I didn't do this sooner!As you already know,I REALLY LOVE,ADORE,ENJOYED,...and whatever word I can think of,this piece (lol...No,I'm seroius)!The reason why I like it so much is very obivious.I'm an Anarchist and I'm not afraid to admitt it either,but I'm fighting for a very dang good reason and not just cause I can or want to.I feel that America needs to clean up it's act.There are some very honorable,nice,clean and deserve-to-live people living here,so I'm not going to say it's the people itself,but,instead,the government.It's like a parent-child or even a monkey-see-monkey-do situation.All of this dirtiness and unmoralness conduct is just wrong 'cause it truely shows what some people will do for a pretty penny,per say...And that's what this piece states CLEARLY...And I love that!You say soo much about how they just throw in innocent lives to fight our wars when over half of the wars are over land or money.That's why I love this so much...So much truth in so little space.Thank you for such a truthful and awesome write.God bless and happy holidays! :- ) - Lindel
    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by LRRolins | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a well done commentary on the United States of America... i suggest you check out one or two of my political poems, especially American Soldier... i think you will appreciate them...
    your rhyme scheme is a little unorthodox, but it works

    and it is apparent that you care deeply about this all as you have written beautifully and passionately on a subject that most people just pass over... nicely done and a new favorite...

    PEACE and LOVE, greg
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by geherald | [ Reply to This ]


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