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    dots Submission Name: ”My travelling companion"dots

    Author: KNS
    Elite Ratio:    5.19 - 181/153/51
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dots”My travelling companion"dots

    Shining blood drips
    on my shivering hands
    removing my humanity
    circling in doubt

    There is a path through the noise
    through the materialized wilderness
    Why do you always lose faith
    before we reach the goals
    Leaving me behind
    Circling in doubt

    Do you doubt, in my real intentions
    since you turned your back again
    not partaking in the work
    not living the promised
    just making excuses.

    I am just..
    Left here
    Circling in doubt

    Submitted on 2005-12-06 14:51:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh my...
    that was... wow
    i dont get the whole "circling in doubt" bit... i probably should but it's just not coming to me.
    what caused you to write this?
    i mean that if you wrote a poem this powerful you must have a reason, right?
    someone must have done something to you to cause you to write this. it most likely was something bad. i would so push that person down... unless if it's a gorilla, then i'll run away, very fast.

    sweet writing
    thanks for telling the world
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by kiet aiden | [ Reply to This ]

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