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    dots Submission Name: It's Just Naturaldots
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    Author: Munchie_1226
    ASL Info:    25/F/E.STL
    Elite Ratio:    4.49 - 1831/1834/185
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 1469
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1078



    Description:
       I hate posting unfinished work....but this is how I am going to put this.....some will come and read it...they will be on my level...to those who read it...

    GO AHEAD AND PICK UP WHERE I LEFT OFF! Seriously....use the title....do your thing....it could be fun!

    Much love to those who support this side of me. I'm just being me!


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsIt's Just Naturaldots
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    You can hear my echo,
    Even if I donít speak.
    I can blind you from the perfection,
    Of my curves and physique.
    Please donít hate on me,
    Because you canít get on your feet.
    Iím sure that if we went head to head,
    You would unable to compete.

    You seeÖ

    I donít try to be vicious.
    Itís just natural.
    I donít try to be malicious.
    Itís just natural.
    I got enemies and haters,
    Itís just natural.
    Iíve had my share of traitors,
    Itís just natural.

    At times, I try to hide,
    The type of person I am.
    Yet, there are even times,
    Oscar steps out of his can.
    Some just brush me off,
    I guess they donít understand.
    They donít know what itís like,
    To feel the back of my hand.

    ButÖ.

    *repeat second verse*




    Submitted on 2005-12-06 16:54:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      well little miss flowisist...

    i like this...
    not enought people get real in there poetry
    but i see you do...

    "Yet, there are even times,
    Oscar steps out of his can."

    lets be honest they dont know what your talking about...but this grouch has been known to step out of his can 2...
    i loved that line...(an the whole thing 2)

    an its just natural 4 you to flow how you do...
    toast to your words & verbs...

    one....

    | Posted on 2006-04-04 00:00:00 | by elohimswork | [ Reply to This ]
      LiLi
    I really enjoyed reading this one
    I like your rapid fire rhyme style
    It is quick and allows all the words to remain trapped in your head so the message stays forever
    Enjoyed this one
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    Ron

    And My mom wrote the last poem of mine you commented on I dont know if you read the introduction
    I put 2 of her writes on my page today please check them out if you get a chance
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      You are soo hott!
    Everything I read of yours is a hit. And that sh*t wit the bull Unknown Soldier, Love it. I was just flowing wit it for a moment. The first Verse is my favorite! There is a realness in your work that attracts me to your stuff.
    Keep it up!


    Singlerose:)
    | Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by SingleRose | [ Reply to This ]
      whats up doll,
    this was wonderfull, i absolutly feel in love with the feeling of the song as soon as i listened to it. and i did mean listened to it. thats one thing i like about your rymes, you make me hear them. but the only thing is i felt it wasn't near long enough, its not short by any means, but it would be great if there was more

    Duece
    Robbin Hood
    *to a fellow pimp!
    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by Robbing Hood | [ Reply to This ]
      The understanding is there completely,
    I keeping going back to re-read it in my mind so I can create a beat for it, I think it would need to be the same beat for the 1st and last verse, and then a slow one in the middle for the chorus. ..

    Cause it's just natural... I think I myself will write something that revolves around that statement...

    gravy...

    brax
    | Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by Brack-Attax | [ Reply to This ]
      HMMM whats up curvacious! this was a styling poem and would be a geat hip hop Lil kim sounding track, i don't want to add to this because this expresses your flo and timing with your game and i think i would'nt contribute to your style in this peace, it speaks for itself...i loved the corus, streamlined and effective in spelling your thoughts!sometimes you have to be viscious to protect whats yours...

    later!
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by orpheus | [ Reply to This ]
      i don't go out of my way
    to watch what i say and do
    its just natural for a kid to tell the truth
    growning up in a cold globe
    tupperware with no holes
    so how would you expect this grasshopper to grow?
    i stay low in the grass
    figure my chances at last
    you crass individuals can kiss my black ass
    cuz i don't know exaclty what i have to prove
    when i just made all of cyber space in unison move
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      nice little song and I would just say stuff they all said but one thing diffrent is it's a diffrent style that I'm used to
    | Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by DrewDilla | [ Reply to This ]
      pen in hand as i jot down scribbled words
    disturbed by the verbs i use as i splurge
    loved by few while hated by many
    u got a lil skill, but you know me-i got plenty
    dont tempt me
    cuz i may leave you floating above water
    walk into the church to place my hand on the altar

    I donít try to be vicious.
    Itís just natural.
    I donít try to be malicious.
    Itís just natural.
    I got enemies and haters,
    Itís just natural.
    Iíve had my share of traitors,
    Itís just natural.

    photos in frames
    as i oil paint different pictures of pain
    love and disdain
    just listing opposite sides of the game
    power to the poets who take love and hold it
    slightly embarrassed but i'm still one who'll show it
    i've seen best friends turn traitors in the blink of an eye
    hoping i die
    break my fingers when i try touching the sky
    i wish the haters would just stop hating my lines
    unknown soldier, Li kicking the illest of rhymes

    I donít try to be vicious.
    Itís just natural.
    I donít try to be malicious.
    Itís just natural.
    I got enemies and haters,
    Itís just natural.
    Iíve had my share of traitors,
    Itís just natural.
    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      shhh.. girl thats a nice little piece.. it did kinda seem kinda long to keep a flow going.. long i mean the lines.... but [censored] im sure you got something working with it... imma pick it up where you left off.... gimme a little bit, cause im like doing this [censored] before going to school.. but ill keep in touch girl
    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      this definately flows and moves like a song.. the verse expresses the idea really clearly ..which makes your two stanzas really motivating and strengthening to read .. your writing makes me smile Li Li.. it seems like a song to brush off your senses of insecurity and go with the energy of an upwards spiral .. I sort of see what you mean by it not being complete. .. It either needs some sort of concluding stanza ..maybe something to do with the inhibition of not being natura .. or the release of being natural .. I dunno .. it's something that could be either said in one little stanza or a whole nother set of them .. or maybe that's jsut because I am slightly biased and could listen(read ) to you rant on for ages ..

    in your first stanza .. second to last line , i think you could take out the 'that' .. it just seems to flow a bit better without it and it is uneccesasry for the meaning .. so ..

    oh and who is Oscar ..

    ..I'm not really sure what you mean by ..go ahead and pick up wherew I left .. I am new to the world of lili .. heh .. but I sort of feel like mirror imaging the poem .. so .. well Im just gonna go ahead and do that and you can slapp me if it pisses you off .. fair enough _ ..

    it's just unnatural

    you can't hear me shouting
    from my printed words
    You could be blind from the perfection
    of my mental webs and treats
    Please don't hate on me
    because your mask is stuck on tight
    I'm sure if we went head to head
    your wood would loudly creek

    I donít try to be right.
    Itís just unnatural.
    I donít try to be trite.
    Itís just unnatural.
    Be nice to enemies and haters,
    Itís just unnatural.
    Iíve loved my share of traitors,
    Itís just unnatural.

    Most time, they hide in flocks
    shading the person I am
    There are even times
    i'm wrapped up in that tin can.
    Some just brush me off
    I guess they don't see my stand
    They don't know what it's like
    to see the back of my mask

    ..
    ..

    heh .. thanks for the lovely poem, che

    Christian
    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by x-ianhoyskolt | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooo I like that (but then again, i like everything Ive read from you, so Im not surprised that this is awesome too). For some reason, Im like in love with this part:

    "I donít try to be vicious.
    Itís just natural.
    I donít try to be malicious.
    Itís just natural.
    I got enemies and haters,
    Itís just natural.
    Iíve had my share of traitors,
    Itís just natural."

    That is just too great. You never fail to amaze me. Good stuff. As always, excellent job

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      This is why I think I enjoy reading all your posts so much is because it has that type of edge from today's generation and its kind of the way I write ya know. The more urban terms and subjects is what I can really relate to and aside from that...its always different but you are so consistant in making your work flow that it makes me wanna read more & more. Keep it up chic, u do damn good
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by PrettyRicki | [ Reply to This ]
      Does spelling words wrong and leaving words out of place come naturally? Cuz I never seen you write something that has grammatical errors. Hee-hee...just bustin yo chops.

    Nice little song and I would like to see it extended or even add some of your nice qualities to it towards the end or something, but yeah, I liked this display at one of natures many sides. Good stuff maynard.
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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