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    dots Submission Name: Freedom for a Daydots
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    Author: AlabamaFarmGirl
    ASL Info:    50/F/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 518/333/26
    Words: 239
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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       Just a poem for the heck of it!!!!!


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    dotsFreedom for a Daydots
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    Riding her Harley, her face to the wind
    Feels more free than she has ever been
    She puts her bike into high gear
    Thinking of one she holds so near
    Picking up speed, as she sped away
    Laughing aloud and feeling so gay
    Her long hair a loose flying in the wind
    So much freedom, she just had to grin
    Rides all the way up to the mountain top
    This is where she decides to make her stop
    Water cascading down the side of the mountain
    Beautiful, enticing, plunging like a water fountain
    Stepping under the water letting it hit her face
    This was hers, hers alone secret hiding place
    Going and lying her wet body in the sand
    Slept and had those same dreams again
    Grabbed her clothes, she throws them on
    Than on her bike, she sped on home
    The wetness of the water still against her skin
    As she rode thinking of the dream that had been
    In her mind it did stay almost every single day
    She embraced it, but knew to put it at bay
    Pushing on riding her Harley long and hard
    Seeing him in her mind, lets down her guard
    Oh well, what the heck,,Today let it be a reality
    Feel with her body and soul, just for now let it be
    Letting a sense of reality and freedom ring
    Today lifting her voice and letting it sing





    Submitted on 2005-12-06 18:00:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Call me old fashioned, but the B*tch belongs on the back, holding on and making the biker look good. Sorry, but park the wheels and jump on!
    The naked shower part and all the speed, well thats OK. Freedom needs 'wings' not just rubber and nuts for a vibrator.
    Well, are you mad at me yet???? Hahahahaha!
    I'm just kidding, You look cool on a bike, and you deserve one.
    This was quite a ride, and you made us want a ride(either way we can get it).
    A smile is always better after a snarl, I hope the smile has returned
    Do you remember 'Freedoms just another word for nothing else to lose'?
    Later
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! what imagery, I was there on the bike with you arms around you securely as you picked up speed.

    I agree with the others that there's something about a beautiful, feminine woman on a Harley that is very powerful.

    How wonderful that you have that kind of free spirit and independence!

    YOU GO GIRL!!!!

    Leather jacketed,bandana hard riding Steve
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, this was fun and refreshing. I enjoyed reading it; you really brought a touch of freedom. Including her dreams in this story you gave it a deeper meaning. We all need a few hours and some secret place to get in touch with our dreams and with ourselves in a way.
    | Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by Poly Jean | [ Reply to This ]
      love the way to combine the freedom of the road, with the freedom of nature at the waterfall...
    i do not yet have a bike of my own, but hope to soon own one, but i know the feeling of the freedom in nature... that is where most of my poetry was written or where the inspiration to write was found...
    this is a great write for the heck of it... it makes a great read, and would be great in a book... hopefully you'll get it published, eh?
    anyways nicely done, i've got nothing else to say...
    PEACE and LOVE, greg
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by geherald | [ Reply to This ]
      Well now, A Harley Mama too. HAHAHA

    She can write poetry and ride a Hog.

    Yes, for years the HD or any other bike has been freedom. To be one with the road as well as nature.
    Now the waterfall and the dream those are
    disires that have to be quenched from another well.
    Doesn't it just feel good to feel the wind as it hits your face? Doesn't just feel good to be free?
    Oh, I can't say anything that hasn't been said before. I just like the write and the more I try t think of something to say the more I get frusterated at trying.
    I think I will just say...Thanks for the sled ride

    Respect and Admiration

    Clyde
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      I love when a woman finds freedom and excitement in what is usually a mans realm. You obviously grasp the zen of riding a cycle and from one who also shares that experience I think you did a very nice job of expressing it. I enjoy the simplicity and forthrightness of your poetry each time I read it. Nice work! Dan
    | Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]
      Neat! The images were there and the little rhymee story was a pleasure to read...totally captivating the moment. I dug it!

    Good job Linda!
    Whooo-hoooo!
    | Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      There is nothing like a woman and her Harley! LMAO!

    This was very well put together. You told such a story. I could really see her with the imagery that you portrayed in this. It is great when a person can find that place to go where they can get in touch with themself and leave the rest behind. And I assume that it would be even more of a touch if you were on a motorcycle...as the wind blew in your face and you were still enjoying all that there was surrounding you...all the way down to the smell.

    This was great!

    Much love,

    Alicia
    | Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay.. I'm going out and gettin' me a Harley.
    What a lovely description of how it feels to "be free".. even for a day. Just getting away from it all.. letting loose, and being free.
    It's amazing where the mind can take you. Yours went on a nice little journey here. It was fun to read.
    Thing is.. sometimes, when MY mind goes off on a journey.. it forgets to come back. LOL.
    Nice write!
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a lovely poem about being free for a day! Sounds wonderful, this spot in the mountains. I find it is always cleansing for the soul to be able to get away by yourself and spend some time alone. Allows you to really focus on your thoughts and relieve some of life's stress. When I feel this way, I go to the beach. Not far from my house, but just the walk alone is perfect and spending some time breathing the fresh air and listening to the waves usually makes me feel better. Sometimes a brisk walk in the sand along the shore helps too. You have painted some nice imagery with your descriptions and written another fine poem. Great work. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      LET FREEDOM RING!
    I'm gonna have to add this one to my favorites list Linda...
    I think this is a very well written piece and it is easy to read, just love the thought of freedom and the idea of being free as the wind. But also as reallity sets in even though we are somewhat free we do and will always be bound by responsibilities, but, that's ok.
    Enjoyed the read very much,
    !doc`
    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      Long live freedom Linda. Nothing better than driving along with the wind in one's face and letting the road take you along.

    I am not a biker, but I really liked the picture you created of a lone biker just doing their thing, yet still remembering certain things.

    Again, a forthright and inspiring piece - well done.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Riding her Harley to the mountain top. Bathing in a waterfall. Riding home. Freedom, as seen through the eyes of a woman. This puts a nice and fresh twist to the open-road as a symbol of freedom. The fact that she is female and rides, modernizes the image. Her quest for freedom is expressed and captured in her naked waterfall shower, and the fact that she remained this way until after her nap and dream. Her realization of her freedom on the ride home rings of words from songs of freedom. That's a nice use of imagery. So, what can I say to help?
    Well, in L5 you use "speed" and "sped", and I think too close together. I would change "sped" to "raced" or some other word. In L6 I'd drop the word "so". At L7 you don't need "a" before "loose". I'd also add "and" before "flying".

    I hope these little things help. Otherwise, let me say that I liked this, a most enjoyable ride, and a lovely poem. I think this sets free a notion of independence that we can all embrace. I loved it!

    Phil
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by phil askew | [ Reply to This ]


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