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    dots Submission Name: after timedots
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    Author: sickly
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 545/537/203
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Gothic
    Total Views: 953
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    Bytes: 657



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    dotsafter timedots
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    after time
    i tell you that it's over
    we've got to be parting ways
    it's the end of those days
    real and nothing
    living is easy
    when no one is thinking
    it's getting hard that is

    oh can't you see,
    what it's doing to me?

    were you impressed?
    and how did you guess,
    the time of your execution?
    about to happen
    or become
    after death
    a thing to be
    a time to come
    it's over

    lived for years
    as and with
    just like a caged man
    but it's not quite right




    Submitted on 2005-12-06 20:43:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ok Im not into this kind of ryming cant realy understand it at all. whats tyhis mean execution?????????????realy I read it again and the ryhminmg dont stay the same u should try and ryme the same threw out the poem. Hey don't nock me see if u can do it. And make it flow its hard
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by DrewDilla | [ Reply to This ]


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