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after time

Author: sickly
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Words: 95
Class/Type: Lyrics /Gothic
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after time

after time
i tell you that it's over
we've got to be parting ways
it's the end of those days
real and nothing
living is easy
when no one is thinking
it's getting hard that is

oh can't you see,
what it's doing to me?

were you impressed?
and how did you guess,
the time of your execution?
about to happen
or become
after death
a thing to be
a time to come
it's over

lived for years
as and with
just like a caged man
but it's not quite right

Submitted on 2005-12-06 20:43:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ok Im not into this kind of ryming cant realy understand it at all. whats tyhis mean execution?????????????realy I read it again and the ryhminmg dont stay the same u should try and ryme the same threw out the poem. Hey don't nock me see if u can do it. And make it flow its hard
| Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by DrewDilla | [ Reply to This ]

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