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    dots Submission Name: Dark Side IVdots

    Author: BrokenAngel
    ASL Info:    21/F/MI
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 179/157/47
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsDark Side IVdots

    Watching from the crimson peak
    I watch you as you scream
    You didn't listen, you didn't care
    You though all of this was a dream

    Slashing at the Liar's truth
    I save the painful deceit
    From the slayer's hand
    And play my deathly tune

    Watching as you're on you knees
    Asking me for truth
    How can you have the audacity
    To ask me questions you know the answer to?

    Breaking down indifferent wall
    Showing the non-believers
    The truth of fate, the emptyness
    Of us the Truth's recievers

    Cutting of your twisted head
    I show you the truth inside the lies
    The lies among the truth are told
    To those who will not try

    Standing in the bloodied field
    A battle held inside my mind
    Trying hard to keep insane
    So nothing I may find...

    Submitted on 2005-12-06 21:20:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well now, might we be angry? lol! I liked this piece but the last line of the first stanza needs remodling. I particularly enjoy how you make truth out to be absolutly nothingness. Its so [censored] true. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by Di Re Rakord | [ Reply to This ]
      wonderful piece of writing and the expressions and drawings you draw are genuine , i really enjoyed reading it to the last line , keep it up and always draw your feelings so vividly
    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by Tarek Refaat | [ Reply to This ]

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