When I first saw you
it was like kissing fire.
My whole life turned to dust.
My eyes were raw from your gaze.
There is something in me you create:
there is something you destroy.
I feel as original
as the first cell of life.
I like this poem as it is. I think it takes great skill to make a great short poem and I feel you have done that time and again. Sometimes statements that are common work wonderfully, especially when they are linked to a more original thought or way of using them - as in the first two lines. "it was like kissing fire" may not be that original of a line, but when it's used to describe how you felt when you first saw someone (vision, not touch), I think it creates a different kind of originality.
I also like these lines....
"my eyes were raw from your gaze" "I feel as original as the first cell of life" (my personal favorite) What a great way to end the poem.