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    dots Submission Name: A broken girldots

    Author: Catylyx
    ASL Info:    17/F/Sand Springs
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 7/15/7
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsA broken girldots

    She's crying, but she's trying to believe
    That this faith will save her...

    A broken hearted girl found her faith today.
    She dropped the afflictions that marr her flesh
    And accepted a love that won't go away.
    But something happened along the way,
    and her heart nearly shattered from the pain.
    But she kept going, because she knew
    This hope would keep her sane.

    A broken souled girl almost lost her faith today.
    She's crying and refuses to feel,
    To feel this pain that leaves her drained.
    But an angel whispers inside her heart,
    "He keeps you for your broken heart,
    and loves you for your fragile soul."

    A broken girl finally breaks free,
    And although she's crying, she keeps trying.
    Believing that this faith will save her...

    Submitted on 2005-12-07 09:17:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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