A New Hope (Not StarWars)

Author: Flamequill ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 77 /97 /35 Words: 66

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A New Hope (Not StarWars)

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An offered hand to get out of here Confused and unaware my heart beats faster Unexpected and surprised I stare at him with widest of eyes What's this beam of hope? should I take it or leave it Who will it hurt me or him? Neither The option is out there A new home A new hope forever and ever

Submitted on 2005-12-07 10:37:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]

Ok, I really know where you are coming from and completely understand. This is a really interesting poem show ing chances to get out of where we are and unexpected help that can come in an instant. Good Job

| Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by Tabbie Kat | [ Reply to This ]

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