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A New Hope (Not StarWars)


Author: Flamequill
ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan
Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 77 /97 /35
Words: 66
Class/Type: Poetry /Friendship
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This poem is written on an offer my friend gave me. He wants me to move in with him (to Texas) in five years. I think I might take the offer, it's still available then. But I have an alternative plan anyway. I know it's not the best, but hey, please comment.


A New Hope (Not StarWars)



An offered hand
to get out of here

Confused and unaware
my heart beats faster

Unexpected and surprised
I stare at him
with widest of eyes

What's this beam of hope?
should I take it or leave it

Who will it hurt
me or him?

Neither
The option is out there

A new home
A new hope forever and ever




Submitted on 2005-12-07 10:37:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Posted on 2006-03-25 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]
  Ok, I really know where you are coming from and completely understand. This is a really interesting poem show ing chances to get out of where we are and unexpected help that can come in an instant. Good Job
| Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by Tabbie Kat | [ Reply to This ]


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