Stress

Author: Flamequill ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 77 /97 /35 Words: 89

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Stress

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The stress is killing me walls pushing me in I'm trying desperately to push them back Going insane with the yelling Going insane with the stress barely standing on my two feet hang on to good friends' hands Running around place to place doing something or other trying vainly to not VOMIT This massive headache thrums and throbs pounding and parting my skull Lying down writing this I try to find the meaning for bliss Pain is Pai a pounding parting thrumming throbbing feeling

Submitted on 2005-12-07 10:55:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Jagged, yo! This whole this screams unhappy teenager. It's like your writing this while you sit in a bath tub getting ready to slit your wrist but wimp out because all you want is attention. If you're going ot be corporate then do it with style. Nirvana, that band could write crap like this and not ruin it. Hell, Kurt Cobain wrote a whole song about an bad trip to his grandmas that he knew he blew out of proportion. Make it real. don't torment yourself for nothing. Freaking Corporate Lackey...

| Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by Augustine | [ Reply to This ]

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