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    dots Submission Name: Set in stonedots

    Author: Vastmark
    ASL Info:    29/M/U.K
    Elite Ratio:    6.02 - 225/171/26
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Life is full of choices small ones, big ones, moral ones and of course financial, sometimes I/we find it so hard without having any reasurences of the outcome, but how could we. Fate as I see it is not written down and we control our own destiny to a degree, so if you want the good things, sometimes, in the end you have to take the plunge.

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    dotsSet in stonedots

    They plague the lives of all
    not caring what divination
    makes us take the path that’s walked.
    A myriad of possibilities
    branches out to the beyond,
    puzzling the "what ifs"
    trying to peek at the unknown.
    The perils and the pitfalls
    can drive a psyche insane,
    all the while fate just stands there
    and stares us blankly in the face.
    It winks at us and smiles
    in its waggish way.
    Knowing that times ‘a wasting
    That one day it will be too late

    Submitted on 2005-12-07 14:54:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hello Phil,

    The title here makes me think of predestination. In reading the piece I have found that it says to me: no matter which way one goes we all have the same place to go to and/or that death will touch us all. Life can be so complex at times. I like the second line the not caring what divination I assume that the “they” are the possibilities, if you wrote “it” I would have guessed death or fate, which often is one and the same, it hinges on the usage of course. On line six there is “puzzling the what ifs” ok the way that reads is as if the “what ifs” are being puzzled themselves, almost like a funny personification and reversal of roles haha “what ifs” you are now puzzled! Sorry I am a goof. You can put a comma “puzzling, the “what ifs”” I put quotations around the “what ifs” but I think that is just a matter of taste. ~or~ you can put “puzzling are the “what ifs”” either way seems to work. The unknown is scary not knowing what is going to happen next, that is what makes horror movies so great, especially when things POP out at you! From line 9 it does become real interesting. The worrying about what is to come, how it drives people nuts and all long fate smiles. That part is wonderful much time and energy is wasted on that, in life, and there is nothing we can do about it as far as dwelling, when the time comes it comes. True there are actions we can take to prolong the lifespan but thinking about it and letting it get to us doesn’t help. I am glad that line 14 says that: “knowing that times ‘a wasting” and the last line is a taunting little booger it reminds me of another piece I read where it said: “are you ready to pay the fare?” here though it says different I still get that same feeling but I shouldn’t dwell on it. great piece!

    | Posted on 2006-02-12 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      Amen! I agree with this one! I have always believed that only you control your destiny and life is indeed what you make it to be. If you sit and do nothing while life passes you by, you will surely end up with regrets. If you want something in life you have to just go for it. I mean really, what is the worst that can happen?(I always close my eyes tight when I say that hahaha!) Life is all about taking chances and living life to the fullest. In reality, we are all different, but our ending is all the same! Live laugh and be happy! And if your not, do something to change it! Really liked this poem. Take care.

    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I feel that we do all have a destiny. And I do feel that we can guide our destiny. Remember them books that when you got to the bottom of the page...you had to decide what would happen next...then it would say to flip to page so and so? Remember? Well...there was a different ending each time you read the book. I LOVED THOSE BOOKS!

    What was I saying?...

    Oh yeah...well...just like those books...we can decide which page to turn to next...which will lead to a different ending.

    This was wonderful. I LIKED IT!

    Much Love,

    li li
    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very good write
    It is so true that we help establish our fate on this Earth
    We do need to take chances on decisions otherwise we never will truefully know what could have been
    You used your words perfectly with this write
    Great Job!
    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Not bad at all. I would have liked a couple moe references to the "choices" which are the "they" that opens the poem, but I sure can't fault the delivery, very neatly done.

    You come up with some neat subjects!

    be happy

    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]

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