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    dots Submission Name: 17 barsdots

    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    dots17 barsdots

    if I was god I'd make every one equal
    that way there'd be no body fucking with other people
    I'd change all this he say and she say shit
    to who he is where she is, I'm bust they fucking lip,
    people taking steps in the wrong direction
    and thats the reason, for my confession
    yes- nobody can do it like the best
    nobody can take a buck and aim it at your chest
    ya'll bitches ain't worthy, so I'm'a amputate your tongue
    and the meaning of this rap you see the dynasty's begun
    their ain't no competition so weve already won
    this is real like immortal technique, when he was on the grind
    bustin shots at a bad deal, on 17 at a time
    my metaphors are prophetic, some shit you ain't heard
    with rumors spreads like ice, or the mouth spoken word
    you can't understand, So I"ma flip you the bird and say fuck that, I"m just gonna smoke on the curb, In ATKINS

    Submitted on 2005-12-07 16:42:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well...God did make every one equal...we are all of the human race and shouldn't be treated any different then the next. God didn't create ignorance. And that's all the differences come from...people that use their visionaries to manipulate their minds...

    Sorry...I just had to comment on the first line of this...

    Other then that lil discrepancy...you got skills boy! You comin with the heat.

    Mad props for your art!

    | Posted on 2005-12-29 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      was up man thanks for the comments on my old [censored] u need to read my updated [censored] anyway dis was a tight right damn u got on my fav list that [censored] was tght how u learn how 2 write like that we should do a calabo
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by heavy knowledge | [ Reply to This ]
      this was the [censored] killa, i aint ever heard [censored] like this from you man. Aberrant kings for life man. You represent us to the fullest man. We said a long time a go we'd be the greatest, but look at us now man, we were the greatest all along, it just took us this long to figure it out, now we gotta show all these other people what were talking about when we say Aberrant Kings are taking over
    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by Robbing Hood | [ Reply to This ]
      yo this [censored] was ill. probly one of the best from you. i'm putting this on my fave list. it's been a while since u posted and i'm glad to read another one of yours. i was wondering what was taking u so long to get back on ur grind. holla at me when the collabo's done.
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]

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