those damn emo kids -------------------------------------------
the magic is no longer fabricating
musicians are just worried about their ratings
every one with those conspicuous looks in their eyes
along with the un reasonable cry
what is today's sound all about
we have gone so far in theirs no way out
how in the hell did we get so far away
the price on our souls is too much to pay
the music is gone
we are now just pawns
their is no room to breath
are minds are unable to conceive
thoughts of life liberty and happiness
are replaced with those of stress
no room to believe in a higher power
life has gone from sweet to sour
all that is left is fate
but we will all soon be erased
a bunch of spelling errors, 1st line musicians, 4th unreasonable, 12th line conceive, 13th line thoughts, 15th believe, i think there are a few others but I suck at english class so i'll just stop there. I felt I could connect with you when I read this piece. I agree with alot of what you said, but I don't think all music is lost, its just not as good as it once was. My personal fave music period was the seventies. Couldn't go wrong with a guitar back then. Now it is just about who makes the most noise, offend the most people, can push the line the furthest, not about talent and sound. This piece was really good however. I only would change the title. For two reasons. 1, you make no mention of emo kids. 2, it is all music that has dropped in quality
The flow of this piece was very good as well, just keeps going I guess. That's all i have to say. Nice write ! Metal Heart74
nicely done here - i can relate to this easily and i understand the title (i think) its been a while since i left the main stream music scene to follow indie musicians you still are in it for the love of music rather than ratings and money... i am a huge Ani Difranco fan (that may sound strange coming from a guy, but it is true) and i love the rest of the Righteous Babe Records people... indie music is great and about the music not the money... (i think that is what this was talking about, but correct me if i am wrong) anyways, great write, i enjoyed it... PEACE and LOVE, greg
Um... i kinda like it kinda dont. your gonna get alot of people saying you have spelling errors and that but dont listen to them my fave lines are: no room to believe in a higher power life has gone from sweet to sour i think thats the best bit of the poem! dont really get the title what does it mean??? anyway i would give this (cos im to lazy to vote) about a 4/5 its really good!
well. this is pretty good... I like the wording, even if there are a few mistakes...
no room to believe in a higher power life has gone from sweet to sour
beautiful! i like this one...but...I don't get the title at all! 'those damn emo kids' doesn't make much sense, please explain, maybe in your description?
I think I'll add this to my faves...
damn! this was a weird comment! sorry! i'm in a cruddy mood cuz' of Ben and J.J.!
Submission Name: those damn emo kids
