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    dots Submission Name: those damn emo kidsdots

    Author: sweet sorenity
    ASL Info:    24/f/ Ga
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 211/221/58
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthose damn emo kidsdots

    the magic is no longer fabricating
    musicians are just worried about their ratings
    every one with those conspicuous looks in their eyes
    along with the un reasonable cry

    what is today's sound all about
    we have gone so far in theirs no way out
    how in the hell did we get so far away
    the price on our souls is too much to pay

    the music is gone
    we are now just pawns
    their is no room to breath
    are minds are unable to conceive

    thoughts of life liberty and happiness
    are replaced with those of stress
    no room to believe in a higher power
    life has gone from sweet to sour

    all that is left is fate
    but we will all soon be erased

    Submitted on 2005-12-07 18:44:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a bunch of spelling errors,
    1st line musicians, 4th unreasonable, 12th line conceive, 13th line thoughts, 15th believe, i think there are a few others but I suck at english class so i'll just stop there.
    I felt I could connect with you when I read this piece. I agree with alot of what you said, but I don't think all music is lost, its just not as good as it once was. My personal fave music period was the seventies. Couldn't go wrong with a guitar back then. Now it is just about who makes the most noise, offend the most people, can push the line the furthest, not about talent and sound. This piece was really good however. I only would change the title. For two reasons.
    1, you make no mention of emo kids.
    2, it is all music that has dropped in quality

    The flow of this piece was very good as well, just keeps going I guess.
    That's all i have to say. Nice write !
    Metal Heart74
    | Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by Metal Heart74 | [ Reply to This ]
      nicely done here - i can relate to this easily and i understand the title (i think)
    its been a while since i left the main stream music scene to follow indie musicians you still are in it for the love of music rather than ratings and money... i am a huge Ani Difranco fan (that may sound strange coming from a guy, but it is true) and i love the rest of the Righteous Babe Records people... indie music is great and about the music not the money... (i think that is what this was talking about, but correct me if i am wrong)
    anyways, great write, i enjoyed it...
    PEACE and LOVE, greg
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by geherald | [ Reply to This ]
      Um... i kinda like it kinda dont.
    your gonna get alot of people saying you have spelling errors and that but dont listen to them my fave lines are:
    no room to believe in a higher power
    life has gone from sweet to sour
    i think thats the best bit of the poem!
    dont really get the title what does it mean???
    anyway i would give this (cos im to lazy to vote) about a 4/5 its really good!
    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by Brat05 | [ Reply to This ]
      well. this is pretty good...
    I like the wording, even if there are a few mistakes...

    no room to believe in a higher power
    life has gone from sweet to sour

    beautiful! i like this one...but...I don't get the title at all! 'those damn emo kids' doesn't make much sense, please explain, maybe in your description?

    I think I'll add this to my faves...

    damn! this was a weird comment! sorry! i'm in a cruddy mood cuz' of Ben and J.J.!

    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by Avril54 | [ Reply to This ]

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