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    dots Submission Name: never sleeping treedots

    Author: andnow
    ASL Info:    19.f.wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 136/135/42
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Prose/
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       We had to write this as a description of nature for my AP English class while studying Transcendentalism. I thought, why not post it here?

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    dotsnever sleeping treedots

    A tree stands alone in the silence of the blackness aroused by the early setting of the winter sun. Roots erupt in the midst of shadow-blanketed grass, where little green creeps through. An aged surrounding of bark marks the strength and wisdom that only a tree can embrace. As the wind breathes gently, a gathering of leaves dance around the branches. The faintly haunting echo of the owl’s calling sounds along the night. The fresh sent of crisp winter air collides with the lulling clouds hiding the illumination above. Amidst the center of a slumbering neighborhood, the tree stands awake.

    Submitted on 2005-12-08 01:25:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The imagery is beautiful! I could see the tree and the night wonderfully. I especially enjoyed how you described the owl's calling.Thanx for taking the time to share. I wish I would have had a teacher in school that tried to stretch my abilities as yours did!
    | Posted on 2008-02-17 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the imagery, a lot, but some of the word choice was poor. lulling clouds, tree aroused, tree can embrace. these, and other choices like them, seemed awkward to a degree, and this took away from my enjoyment of the piece, likewise, form is an issue, as the poem (prose) is displayed in a simple chunk form, not even attempting to attract a reader with it's shape.

    Like the above paragraph for instance. ^

    Ya' dig?

    I just thought you might like a comment on this piece after all this time, so I decided I'd be the one to give it to you.

    WIth my luck, someone will come along and post before I do, and I'll feel like a regular ass.

    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by Sheakhan | [ Reply to This ]

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