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    dots Submission Name: It's just naturaldots
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    Author: solemnpen
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 303/339/42
    Words: 329
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 976
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2207



    Description:
       well LiLi, had asked me to write a couple verses....

    I brought the idea up to my people, and they came up with a beat... and I came up with the hook, still trying to be original.. not to take nothing from munchie, cause she's got it going on.

    But yeah, this what we got. It sounds pretty good.


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    dotsIt's just naturaldots
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    I look up at me standing in the mirror
    if these walls could talk
    they could tell you the miles i've walked
    The nightmares audiences have brought
    Lifes hard lessons that are easily taught
    16 already distraught
    to live without fear, still shedding tears
    In the inside, waterfalls flow down this steel heart
    As my spotlight keeps tearing me apart

    To live fearless, shit rolling off my shoulders
    It's just natural
    To live with my soul in my pen
    It's just natural
    Succeding by exceeding dreams
    It's just natural

    The last time or first roll call
    Just let it flow, roll the words off your lips, don't stall
    Think of the legacy each letter leaves in the minds
    of the kids leaning on the edge, like a crack fiend
    Anticipating the next hook, wanting a taste of your dream
    How many can say they wake up with dat feeling?
    if you know a prayer say it, as I look up at this mic
    with my soul crying, kneeling
    Hoping the music keeps going on
    As our legacy, keeps dreams alive, When we're gone


    To live fearless, shit rolling off my shoulders
    It's just natural
    To live with my soul in my pen
    It's just natural
    Succeding by exceeding dreams
    It's just natural

    emotionless dreams, gives me motionless prey
    As the preacher tries to pray
    As we pray
    That the spotlight won't go out
    As I know these dreams won't dream theirself
    As I know these lyrics won't write theirself
    Pen and paper, I keep giving you self made wealth
    To clutch this mic, white on my knuckles, this night
    Might be the last,
    But when it's over, I can realize
    That I was a natural
    All my dreams, we're just natural


    To live fearless, shit rolling off my shoulders
    It's just natural
    To live with my soul in my pen
    It's just natural
    Succeding by exceeding dreams
    It's just natural




    Submitted on 2005-12-08 04:39:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i did this [censored] too i just left it as a comment on muchie's page. i only wrote 2 verses. i thought ur [censored] was better than mine though. good job. still waiting on pj and phil. them niggas take forever
    | Posted on 2005-12-10 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      This was tight! I liked the flow and I liked the raw, in your face mentality of this rap. I had a tune in head as I read it. It's been awahile since I read your work. I'd say you still got it going on! Tell me when you get on Soul Train or Bet with this.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      It is just natural for we as indeviduals to keep on living stron so that we may achieve our dreams. I mean, it seems to me that you are kinda portraying the adversity, and the speed bumps that you hit in a musical career, as well as in life. I am a musician, and i know how hard the road is, in my career and in life. You just have to keep pressing on. In order to acheive our dreams, and exceed the expectations that others have set for us, we must be extraordinary, shining n every way possible. I live for me, my family, and the my audience. What I write and play will effect the crowd. I can see you doing rap, I kinda saw a little bit of maybe an eminem influance in your song. But I can tell that it is truly yours. Just remember, dont shoot for what others expect, shoot above that, way above that, become the miracle. I loved the song. It was deep, you reall kept it good. Some of the ines I didnt understand, it didnt follow a symmatry that I could pick up right off the bat. But I know that the beat coincides with the rhymes. Good job man.
    poeticvisionary
    | Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by poeticvisionary | [ Reply to This ]
      Uh Oh! Do your thing pimpin! DO YOUR THING! I am so pleased with all you guys. You all really did a great job continuing my work. I don't know if you went back and read mine...but people just added their verses in their comments...

    You guys are awesome. This was definitely original! Not only did you spit it...but you chewed it up for a while first!

    Bravo boy! I give you mad props for this one!

    Much love,

    li
    | Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      at first glance this poem seems quite dark, but when i read it again i can see light shimmering through in your words. there's something there about dreams and hopes, they're just natural. life has become so unnatural for so many people and they live this poem without that shimmering light to break through their darkness. you made me remember this fact in your poem, well done. i would only suggest you fix the grammatical errors even if they were on purpose, this poem has a dark elegance and i think it only hurts it to have improper grammar.
    | Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by wherRutakingME | [ Reply to This ]


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