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When the blood starts running


Author: caspian
ASL Info:    23/m/Denmark
Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 134 /189 /57
Words: 118
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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this is actually a song I wrote a few days ago, but I thought it would fit in here as well....you guys can be the judges!


When the blood starts running



im a sentimental man
i keep my ears to the ground
and when the train slides by
im sure i heard a rabbit die because i am
a man

and when the birds starts singing
in the top of the trees
i rise my voice and i sing along on their keys
because i am
a man

and when you scream my name
in the deeps of my dreams
i cry my tears cause i know you´ll never
come back home again
home again

and when the blood starts running
in the palm of my hands
i close my eyes and
only think about the pain
because i am
a man




Submitted on 2005-12-08 09:43:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I liked this one, the text was follow smoothly and the thought behind was beautyful. I have just one question: mam as in a man, or as in human? Not really important, just curious.
| Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by lennox | [ Reply to This ]
  its a nice poem but this line ->come back home again
how come on the last line u dont say->a man. u did on all the other ones and I think if do it to most then why not do it to all. I think u might not realy read it over. like u just proff read it but u didnt realy read it.
| Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by DrewDilla | [ Reply to This ]
  Beautiful poem.
"and when you scream my name
in the deeps of my dreams
i cry my tears cause i know you´ll never
come back home again"
I really love this line. This poem is very orginal and interesting.
| Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
  "When the train slides by"
I love that line!
I love the way this turns really dark and gets more and more intense, very unique
| Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by Sugar | [ Reply to This ]


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