after the song has ended,
my feet have danced the final glide,
the final slide, the final step.
i feel the melody deep within my bones
as your fingers find a wicked
game upon my naked back.
embraced within the circle of your arms,
I dance inside my mind.
| to me this seems like it could be going toward a sexual experience or encounter that you do not want to forget, such as a wedding night, first time, and so forth. good luck with trying to finish. let me know when it is finished i would like to read it.|
|| Posted on 2006-03-18 00:00:00 | by devonsmom03 | [ Reply to This ] || each piece of cloth tears off to a rhythem|
everytime I am near or withhim
he has that magical melodie
that plays continuelessly
peace nice poem here liked it
|| Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by dudethis | [ Reply to This ] || It feels like you have been there before, an excellent start though. keep it up. Very passionate, not something i would normally read but i enjoyed it. please add some more.||| Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by Tabbie Kat | [ Reply to This ] || Indeed very unique. Add more to it. Romantic in a way. Very passionate too. I guess you could go on more with this one. Talking about each step of the dance and describing differet emotion you feel with each one and ending the poem with last step that ended with a lover's kiss. It would be a softly written poem and as you have started the poem on a fantastic note, I would keen to read more :)||| Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ] |