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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots
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    Author: Tabbie Kat
    ASL Info:    16/female/middleofnowhere
    Elite Ratio:    2.68 - 37/19/5
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
    Total Views: 879
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 628



    Description:
       whatever, it expresses how i feel right now


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    I don't know what to feel
    I'm told by authority to do this and that
    But i'am dazed and don't know to whom i speak.

    I don't know what to say.
    My friends have left me behind.
    Their quests for friendship have forgotten me.

    I don't know what to do.
    To go on would be change
    to go back would never suceed.

    Sadness fills my soul
    am i judgemental of those differant?
    Of religion and race?

    They tell me i'am and leave me behind.
    The group has fallen
    only the true remain.




    Submitted on 2005-12-08 11:06:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a very sad poem. I hate to feel alone, but everyone just leaves me alone so...

    Don't worry. You'll find a friend. I mean, I just usually sit alone by myself, and then someone comes up to me and asks "What's wrong? You look so sad" and then we start a conversation and then boom! There's a friend for ya.
    I don't really have any more advice.

    I hope you feel better soon, though. This was a really good write.

    -Shadow
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Lavender | [ Reply to This ]
      It's made me really sad since line one. This is a very hard topic to write about and I praise you for that. I go through exactly the same thing for all but a few exeptional friends who always stay with me, but I just got those friends this year. Very deep and I like how you describe it and I really love how at the end you state:
    "The group has fallen
    only the true remain."
    I can totally relate and that's the thing that touches me more in this. Just next time, try to add a little more description? Overall, I love it.
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Spiderman | [ Reply to This ]
      I believe your being a bit overdramatic about this whole thing. Perhaps you should take a look at yourself and see if there's anything about you that may be causing this schism.
    If you can't find anything then it must be them.
    Be yourself.
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Oddly Normal | [ Reply to This ]
      Dont be sad..
    just remember - -
    If you feel that all the light has left, dont cry because that will only disble your ability to see the stars.

    If its me..
    well, Im changing.
    Dont be sad.
    | Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]
      i'am ??? im not sure about that line.
    I am a big believer in titles... try to find one for this..
    Sadness fills my soul
    am i judgemental of those differant?
    Of religion and race?

    is this the main part of the poem? are you the one that judges or other people?
    keep me posted when you find a title.
    | Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
      It's no fun to be and feel lonely. You are at an age where the world seems to revolve around the social and the "group"...this piece, to me, indicates that you want something different or believe something different and because of that you're alone.
    On days like this it doesn't feel like it but find something good and positive with the day Now and find the friend within to keep you company and let the divine lift your spirits.
    I hope you feel better!
    Love,Peace,Joy~Know,Experience,BE~~~
    tif
    | Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Your being a little paranoid. Just buy a tin hat, wait for a thunderstorm and goon a long walk on a short pier.
    Lighten up, yo. Eat a chocolate bar.
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Augustine | [ Reply to This ]


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