Description: Any feedback is good to me. Just let me know what you thought, if you liked it or you didnt like it. What can i do better. Just anything you can think of just write it down. I just hope you enjoy this poem
Abuse -------------------------------------------
Cute and loving
Mornings of breakfest and surprises
Flowers and gifts
This all changed the night you'll met
Eyes of an angle then they turened cold as ice
This time it came with a big price
Areas that never had a bruise
But know there's a new one everyday of the week
Each bruise has there own stories to tell
You hear the voice of others
Telling you this shit aint right
But you stay even if it takes your life
I love him and he loves me
But with this said you still stay
He says he won't do it anymore
Then it happens
Again
Again
And
Again
Then you realize this isn't right
so you leave in the middle of the night
Feeling free as a bird
You're free know
Feeling good like you're on top of the world
But then he finds you
Eyes colder then the last time
You close your eyes
In a snap they open
And you find yourself free again
Only because abuse has finally taken over your life for good
is this from personal experience?? if so it doesnt seem that it would be yours...if it is i think you can release alot more emotional energy...and i recommend it...it was good but i expected alittle more...i think cuz i always write from personal experience... xoxox me p.s. please check out more of my stuff...
I like it alot the title drawn me to it, because i wrote a poem about an abusive husband (maybe you should check it out its kinda similiar)nice flow didnt really get the ending though. love him and he loves me But with this said you still stay He says he won't do it anymore
Then it happens Again Again And Again i love this bit it is so true in so many cases thats what the say i will never do it again and yet it always happens again. anyway i love this poem 5/5 look forward to seeing some of your other work soon! -Sarah
Submission Name: Abuse
