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    dots Submission Name: Is It Right?dots
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    Author: tinkerbellsas
    ASL Info:    22/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 67/66/32
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 659
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 610



    Description:
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    dotsIs It Right?dots
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    Every little thing you do
    More and more makes me love you
    I talk about you all the time
    All good things of course

    I love you more than you'll ever know
    Oh, how can I make it show
    I would do anything for you
    All I want is you to be mine

    You kiss me and hold me tight
    Why can't it be right
    Please just ask me to be your's
    I'd say yes in a heartbeat

    It's obvious you must like me
    So why can't it just be
    You and me, me and you
    Together forever in harmony




    Submitted on 2005-12-08 17:16:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This really sounds like a song or something which isn't a bad thing because it seems liek it would be a good song I really like how it kinda just came together
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by grinninggashes | [ Reply to This ]
      I wanted to be with you alone
    And talk about the weather
    But traditions I can trace against the child in your face
    Wonít escape my attention
    You keep your distance with a system of touch
    And gentle persuasion
    Iím lost in admiration could I need you this much
    Oh, youíre wasting my time
    Youíre just wasting time

    Something happens and Iím head over heels
    I never find out till Iím head over heels
    Something happens and Iím head over heels
    Ah donít take my heart
    Donít break my heart
    Donít throw it away

    I made a fire and watching burn
    Thought of your future
    With one foot in the past now just how long will it last
    No no no have you no ambition
    My mother and my brothers used to breathe in clean in air
    And dreaming Iím a doctor
    Itís hard to be a man when thereís a gun in your hand
    Oh I feel so...

    Something happens and Iím head over heels

    And this my four leaf clover
    Iím on the line, one open mind
    This is my four leaf clover
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]


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