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    dots Submission Name: Shortcomingsdots

    Author: Ratboy
    ASL Info:    17/Male/South Slocan B.C.
    Elite Ratio:    5.17 - 50/73/22
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
    Total Views: 1232
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       Well, I generally stay away from writing angst poems, but I thought what the hell... get it all out in one shot. Felt better to confess anyhow.

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    Woke up today tongue deep in excrement
    Normality like shrapnel in my skin
    Long distance call to Credibility
    Procrastination waiting for a sin

    Plane for Practicality is falling
    And Conscience tyrants from a dusty throat
    Patience of my imprints spreading thinner
    So dry excuses get a second coat

    This helping hand canít help but check its nails
    Clumsy, Wisdomís waltz has lost intention
    Excitement shares the morning with Regret
    Sobered in a ditch outside Perfection

    Bathe in part with parts of all the parted
    For salted sun can season rawness red
    Reflection always shies to show its face
    And Honesty is seldom overfed

    Disorder knows not how to write a cheque
    Distraction learning well as where to sit
    Confession sits in solitude on tongue
    As Resolution starves within a pit

    Submitted on 2005-12-08 21:32:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I have read this twice and I still can't come up with anything to say, you leave me in awe and somewhat intimidated. I feel like I am not smart enough to comment on this(by now you should know about my lack of intelligence).

    So I will leave you with this; I enjoyed reading this and the fact that you have made me feel small, is rather cool obn your part.

    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]

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