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Submission Name: Timber dots

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Author:	Th_Plonk
Elite Ratio:	6.38 - 41/41/10
Words:	69

Class/Type:	Poetry/Friendship
Total Views:	198
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	474

Description:
Tough guys don't cry - sometimes this is construed (usually by the girls) as a lack of emotion.

Timber

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I heard that if a tree falls
with no-one near
it makes no sound.

So you smiled.
I smiled.
We nodded.
"Yep."
"I guess that's that then."

And you were calm.
I kept poker faced.
Nothing unusual
as if I was leaving for a month or two
as if you'd see me again.

We shook hands.
As I walked away
I thought I heard a sound.

Submitted on 2005-12-08 23:15:43 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a good and very solid poem. Your words are heartfelt and I can tell as I read this that this friend meant an awful lot to you. I have always thought it a huge shame that men must live with the "real men dont cry" nonsense. It is a basic human emotion and a very good one at that. It helps to relieve stress and tension and is very therapeutic. I think a man is even more of a man if he can be in tune with his feelings and show them regardless of what others may think. It is sad when you part from a dear friend. It's loss is indeed profound and I like the analogy you use here at the end with thinking you heard a sound. Very good write. Take care.

Lorna
| Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  The value of silence can only be appreciated by people who know how to listen... and people know how to listen to other people if their willing to spend their time doing so... and people only spend time that they'll never be able to take back for another when that person/s is/are worth it.

I know how that feeling... the intimacy wrapped in silence between two people who put up barriers in front of each other not knowing that they actually put it around themselves... as a union. This piece speaks of it quite well... the simplicity of its bulk to hide the emotions raging inside... the neatness of 'coming-full-circle'... the way it channels that feeling of real... 'you-don't-know-what-goes-on-in-my-life-but-ironically-I-feel-alive-around-you.. and all that cheese wrapped in aluminum foil.

For all we know... you two could actually be strangers but... no... not really... not when your talking about mundane stuff and not realizing the never-conceptualized-holding-of-hands together.

That's true intimacy...

friendship...

whatever...
| Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
  this is great - a poem about best friends that have lost each other... at least i got that thanks to your own comment above & o probably would have come up with something like that on my own... it reminds me of my best friend from high school whom i dont talk to anymore so i kinda can relate
this is a great poem and with the describtion that guys dont cry makes it even better... great write...
PEACE and LOVE, greg
| Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by geherald | [ Reply to This ]
  Erm... actually he and I were best friends. Good enough friends that we each knew the other was feeling exactly the same thing. Depth of friendship between guys is supposed to be one of those things you don't talk about - otherwise people might think you're a bit queer.

But even if you don't talk about something, it can be a pillar in your life. And if you don't shed a stingle tear, it still shakes the forest with its fall.

Thanks for the comment, GK.

The Plonk
| Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by Th_Plonk | [ Reply to This ]
  No one's commented on this one yet?!? One of the very best I've come across so far. That is, if the last line means what I think it means, which I assume you being the writer and all you'd write it on purpose. You make it to look like you broke her (tree) heart... but there's no reference to your own state of mind, which to me implies the same as her, maybe more since you were the author who created the whole scene. The whole thing seems to overlook the author to focus on the pain of the other, and dare I say if it had come back around to focusing on you, well, guys don't cry, right?
Incredible lyrics.
| Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by ghostknight | [ Reply to This ]

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