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Submission Name: Condemned dots

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Author:	solitary_cross
ASL Info:	19/female/Philippines
Elite Ratio:	3.4 - 92/107/24
Words:	70

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	778
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	458

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This is about the world's cruelty against those who are wrongly accused, especially those who are deprived of comfort and humane living in these hard times thru the image of a prisoner about to be sentenced to death the day after.

Condemned dots

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His breath rushed out his heaving chest
The night air as his only companion
Between his fingers is his pen
Writing down every counting second

His eyes reflected the candle’s flame
The watch stroked past his sorrow
As his hands moved to write his name
His final mark against the fading glow

From the window he saw not the light
But the nearing sight of yesterday’s shadows

Submitted on 2005-12-09 07:07:07 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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could relate to a desperate situation, its like waking up screaming and kicking and sweating realizing you have never really slept at the first place...

awesome freaky.

| Posted on 2007-05-28 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]
What, was he sentenced to death? I like it, It kinda gave me the chills dunno know Y. The rhyming was planned

I hope to see more

-Sharon
| Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.