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    dots Submission Name: Condemneddots
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    Author: solitary_cross
    ASL Info:    19/female/Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 92/107/24
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 591
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    Bytes: 458



    Description:
       This is about the world's cruelty against those who are wrongly accused, especially those who are deprived of comfort and humane living in these hard times thru the image of a prisoner about to be sentenced to death the day after.


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    dotsCondemneddots
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    His breath rushed out his heaving chest
    The night air as his only companion
    Between his fingers is his pen
    Writing down every counting second

    His eyes reflected the candle’s flame
    The watch stroked past his sorrow
    As his hands moved to write his name
    His final mark against the fading glow

    From the window he saw not the light
    But the nearing sight of yesterday’s shadows




    Submitted on 2005-12-09 07:07:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      could relate to a desperate situation, its like waking up screaming and kicking and sweating realizing you have never really slept at the first place...

    awesome freaky.
    | Posted on 2007-05-28 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]
      What, was he sentenced to death? I like it, It kinda gave me the chills dunno know Y. The rhyming was planned


    I hope to see more

    -Sharon
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]


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