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This is about the world's cruelty against those who are wrongly accused, especially those who are deprived of comfort and humane living in these hard times thru the image of a prisoner about to be sentenced to death the day after.
His breath rushed out his heaving chest
The night air as his only companion
Between his fingers is his pen
Writing down every counting second
His eyes reflected the candle’s flame
The watch stroked past his sorrow
As his hands moved to write his name
His final mark against the fading glow
From the window he saw not the light
But the nearing sight of yesterday’s shadows
Submitted on 2005-12-09 07:07:07
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could relate to a desperate situation, its like waking up screaming and kicking and sweating realizing you have never really slept at the first place...
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What, was he sentenced to death? I like it, It kinda gave me the chills dunno know Y. The rhyming was planned
I hope to see more
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