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    dots Submission Name: Christmas Lightsdots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsChristmas Lightsdots
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    Her life…
    glows as a string of not hung
    Christmas lights plugged in and
    tangled with no pattern intended.

    It’s a set of floor bound twinkles.

    Her life…
    is not to be nailed to the eaves
    for an awe filling drive by display
    or strung on a temporary tree.

    Small glories have no appeal.

    Her life…
    is visions and prayers of ways
    to toss blinking bulbs to the sky
    and shine, stretched out as stars.

    So she rests and gleams where she is.




    Submitted on 2005-12-09 07:30:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is one of the most thoughtfull andd affirming poems i have read recently
    i love the metaphor and the thought of you being inspired by the tangled treelights.
    i love the scale of your imagery
    ( does that make sense?)
    from floor-bound to stars
    from domestic to univeresal

    and i love the last line
    ''So she rests and gleams where she is..''
    it is a very warm poem and i can't offer any improvement ...i don't think it needs any
    | Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by ertha | [ Reply to This ]
      this was very nice. I think I must make it a favorite. It reminded me of Christmas parties and being oneself. Both good things. I liked the ending the best, but the whole poem is fantastic.

    Her life…
    is visions and prayers of ways
    to toss blinking bulbs to the sky
    and shine, stretched out as stars.

    So she rests and gleams where she is.

    Write some more like this. Very life affirming. Very woman affirming. Love it!
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is lovely :) ...and i second everything that lmz wrote :)) this is very humble and very sweet and i loved the metaphor you used..the only line that gave me trouble was the second..something doesnt read quite right...

    glows as a string of not hung


    maybe just take out the 'of'

    stormy
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a lovely poem. This says so much in the way of self-esteem and confidence. She doesnt need to be an attention seeker or stand out in a crowd. She is happy and content just being where and who she is. She is thankful for what she has and is comfortable wearing her own shoes. Not out to impress anyone as she has already impressed the most important person...herself. Very strong and solid poem. I love the metaphor you have used here. Nice work. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this Chrys. this speaks of such humility
    and simplicity, being who we are at our core,
    like stars shining in the night sky, not ornaments
    or bright lights that are only for adornment.

    So she rests and gleams where she is..

    that is what is is about, isn't it? being who we are and where we are at any given moment in
    our lives..

    thanks for this, it's a wonderful reminder of the
    beauty of every soul.

    peace,
    ~Cat

    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow Chrystine, this was amazing. I get the feeling of a person who knows they are a shining bright light yet are humble and content enough with themselves that they need not flaunt that to the world or put it on display...because the greater glory will come at the end and be an awe inspiring legacy. But until that time this person will glow and gleam like you say. Nice stuff...I think this was grrrrr8!
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      This had such a down-to-earth feel of humility and simplicity. The imagery of the dreams and hopes, coupled with the reality of the subject's present circumstances lent itself to a quiet hope.

    I really enjoyed this.
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]


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