This is one of the most thoughtfull andd affirming poems i have read recently i love the metaphor and the thought of you being inspired by the tangled treelights. i love the scale of your imagery ( does that make sense?) from floor-bound to stars from domestic to univeresal
and i love the last line ''So she rests and gleams where she is..'' it is a very warm poem and i can't offer any improvement ...i don't think it needs any
this was very nice. I think I must make it a favorite. It reminded me of Christmas parties and being oneself. Both good things. I liked the ending the best, but the whole poem is fantastic.
Her life… is visions and prayers of ways to toss blinking bulbs to the sky and shine, stretched out as stars.
So she rests and gleams where she is.
Write some more like this. Very life affirming. Very woman affirming. Love it!
This is lovely :) ...and i second everything that lmz wrote :)) this is very humble and very sweet and i loved the metaphor you used..the only line that gave me trouble was the second..something doesnt read quite right...
This is a lovely poem. This says so much in the way of self-esteem and confidence. She doesnt need to be an attention seeker or stand out in a crowd. She is happy and content just being where and who she is. She is thankful for what she has and is comfortable wearing her own shoes. Not out to impress anyone as she has already impressed the most important person...herself. Very strong and solid poem. I love the metaphor you have used here. Nice work. Take care.
i love this Chrys. this speaks of such humility and simplicity, being who we are at our core, like stars shining in the night sky, not ornaments or bright lights that are only for adornment.
So she rests and gleams where she is..
that is what is is about, isn't it? being who we are and where we are at any given moment in our lives..
thanks for this, it's a wonderful reminder of the beauty of every soul.
Wow Chrystine, this was amazing. I get the feeling of a person who knows they are a shining bright light yet are humble and content enough with themselves that they need not flaunt that to the world or put it on display...because the greater glory will come at the end and be an awe inspiring legacy. But until that time this person will glow and gleam like you say. Nice stuff...I think this was grrrrr8!
This had such a down-to-earth feel of humility and simplicity. The imagery of the dreams and hopes, coupled with the reality of the subject's present circumstances lent itself to a quiet hope.
Submission Name: Christmas Lights
