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Can I?


Author: Flamequill
ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan
Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 77 /97 /35
Words: 143
Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
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Free verse is my friend....

The answer to this poem is yes, as you will see from "Please Know I Try", tell me what you think

Your weirdo Mexican

Flamequill

PS I'm paranoid of ocilating fans


Can I?



Can I ever repay
all the good he's done
all the pain...
he takes away

Could I ever hold him up
can I be strong for him
my guide is lost
while I am found

Should we switch?
Am I ready
can I be a brohter to him

Can I be the little brother
I want to be
Can I be the friend
he needs me to be

Can I say the words
the spell
to end his pain

Can I talk to him
without screaming
can I try to console him
without telling him about me

Why am I selfish?
This isn't about me
This is about him
and I should be there
stop doubting yourself
and be his friend

Build the fire
and bring him up
be there you ass
and stop being stupid




Submitted on 2005-12-09 08:55:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  veddy interesting... i liked it personall im a fan of no rhyme. Why am I selfish?
This isn't about me
This is about him
and I should be there
stop doubting yourself
and be his friend
that is very very sad. but i think just about everyone can relate.
| Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
  A very personal piece with obvious emotion - the writer is questioning his own strength... I think there are some weaker sections... it wasnt clear to me why you would go from being there for your friend/brother, expressing your intention to put him first - to then want to discuss your own troubles/issues with him ... But... I did find the piece easy and enjoyable to read, and I think the reason it might not be 100% clear to me is because they are feelings/thoughts that come straight from your heart
| Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by Sugar | [ Reply to This ]


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