Can I?
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Free verse is my friend....
The answer to this poem is yes, as you will see from "Please Know I Try", tell me what you think
Your weirdo Mexican
Flamequill
PS I'm paranoid of ocilating fans
The answer to this poem is yes, as you will see from "Please Know I Try", tell me what you think
Your weirdo Mexican
Flamequill
PS I'm paranoid of ocilating fans
Can I?
Can I ever repay all the good he's done all the pain... he takes away Could I ever hold him up can I be strong for him my guide is lost while I am found Should we switch? Am I ready can I be a brohter to him Can I be the little brother I want to be Can I be the friend he needs me to be Can I say the words the spell to end his pain Can I talk to him without screaming can I try to console him without telling him about me Why am I selfish? This isn't about me This is about him and I should be there stop doubting yourself and be his friend Build the fire and bring him up be there you ass and stop being stupid |
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| veddy interesting... i liked it personall im a fan of no rhyme. Why am I selfish? This isn't about me This is about him and I should be there stop doubting yourself and be his friend that is very very sad. but i think just about everyone can relate. | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ] | A very personal piece with obvious emotion - the writer is questioning his own strength... I think there are some weaker sections... it wasnt clear to me why you would go from being there for your friend/brother, expressing your intention to put him first - to then want to discuss your own troubles/issues with him ... But... I did find the piece easy and enjoyable to read, and I think the reason it might not be 100% clear to me is because they are feelings/thoughts that come straight from your heart | | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by Sugar | [ Reply to This ] | |
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