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Knight


Author: shygirl
ASL Info:    16/f/ok
Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 71 /54 /14
Words: 51
Class/Type: Deep Thought /Serious
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this poem was based on the war we are going through. and i wounder why they die
is there a meaning of it all and why are we doing this why most we fight why we need to live peacefully.


Knight



One scariest night
from the brightest light
in the nearest sight
i saw a knight
stroke by a knife
and tears of mite
pored down that night

The poor knight died
but my Question is this
why did that solider die that night




Submitted on 2005-12-09 10:50:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  very emotional and deep. you portray innocence in a way, with this...an innocent young soldier slain at the peak of youth and for what? why? a question to which there will never be a real answer.
| Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by misty_of_moon | [ Reply to This ]
  This paints a picture to me, of a boy/girl coming out of the wood onto a old blood soaked battle field(a gettysburg), where only one opponent remains, tired and broken from hours of conflict. The old soldier has lost everything that ever meant something to him. He is an alcholic, a tramp, and unwanted the man kneels down and silts his throat, or falls on the blade. Saving what he had left. his honor. Not a pretty scene. An probably a wrong interperation. I did like the use of -ight, reminded me of my poem Alright. Thanks for posting.

Yours Truly,
Argos
| Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by Aruemos | [ Reply to This ]


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