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    dots Submission Name: Cotton Candy Skydots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 10
    Class/Type: Haiku/Nature
    Total Views: 581
    Average Vote:    1.0000
    Bytes: 83



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       A beautiful winter-chilled Northern California Sunrise! happy & blessed day All!
    Love,Peace,Joy~Know,Experience,BE~~~
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    dotsCotton Candy Skydots
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    Swirling Sweet Sunrise
    Candied Cotton Candy Clouds
    Natural Sugar High




    Submitted on 2005-12-09 13:34:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      whoa, this was a really nice and sweet poem. I can imagine a nice sunrise. That's an awesome thought...cotton candy clouds. Really nice. This poem was different and I liked it!
    | Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]
      heyyy... good haiku! dam i feel like candyfloss now...thnks for givin me that hunger pain heh:| :P the poems full of sugary imagery... yum
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by GoldenShoes | [ Reply to This ]
      Short Simple and Sweet. A very nice thing. Like a little candy taht was just unwrapped and savored for a little bit. It's nice. Peace, LucyDiamond
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
      the most haiku-iest haiku i've ever read !
    definetly short and sweet, very cute. ha ha most of the comments are longer than the actual poems... still, i like it.

    sorry if this comment sucked .

    cute little piece.

    Avril54
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by Avril54 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this! its nice! i made me feel like i was out in da country at a fair eating pink cotton candy and braggin to all the lil kids! haha! good job!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      "red night, sailor's delight
    red morning, sailors warning"
    At least that is what they say about deep red sunrises. I like the way you portray the soft fluffy clouds as cotton candy. Yummy. It is the peaceful calm before the storm. Sometimes I wonder if I get hyper when I eat something sugary, or if I just sometimes get hyper all of a sudden. I'm not sure.

    Sorry if I sound like I'm blabbing on and stuff. I really like the last line, it just lifts you up and makes you happy. I love red sunrises, they are so beautiful and everytime I see one I say, "Hey! I should go get the camera! This can't be missed!" Of course I never am able to take a picture, but I still enjoy seeing them. This haiku made me remember the beauty of a red sunrise and I really appreciate you bringing it up. It makes me happy on this dreary winter day. Thank you so much for this beautiful haiku.
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh Tiff, i am jealous, haikus I just can't do at all. And this one is perfect, I'm jealous. The last line sums it up nicely, high in sky sugar, but when does the sugar blues hit?

    Hopefully never, unless we're listening to a really great band.

    haha,

    peace and love,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great haiku the opening line promises a sunset and then the rest makes you want to eat sweeties, and that second line might be bugger to say after a few pints.
    Nicely done.

    TTFN
    V
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Vastmark | [ Reply to This ]
      it sort sweet and to the point. i like it. its the best high of all a natural one. but it could be just a little longer eh? im sure it was just some random thought or something but there is hardly anything to grasp onto.
    -brandon
    | Posted on 2005-12-10 00:00:00 | by Leon Kennedy | [ Reply to This ]
      that's the best high, nature..! clouds of cottoncandy
    in the sky makes you want to reach out and
    taste them, feel them and enjoy to your soul..
    you swirled a picture in my head, Tiff.
    thanks for that!

    love,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I saw those cotton candy clouds this morning and yesterday too. The sun cascaded off a peaceful and tranquil redness to them and it was as if Super Mario should have been hopping across them, ya know?
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice Tiffaroo. Short and SWEET. I thinl later you should re-visit this. It is begging you to epand it and give it even more life.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very nice and it flows from my mouth the taste of candy in a sunrise air. I only wish you'd write alittle more on this one b/c it's so cool sounding and I'd like to read more.

    Cool Style
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by childs | [ Reply to This ]


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