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    dots Submission Name: Haunting Medots

    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHaunting Medots

    I feel better than most
    Still inviting in ghosts.
    Haunting my mind
    Essences in divine.
    Haunting my soul
    I'm afraid of letting go.
    I stare into this wine glass
    Recanting visions I call my past.
    For months the sky hasn't been blue
    I isolate myself from missing you.
    I wish I had spoken
    Consequence leaving me broken.
    Pilgrimage to another place
    Reminiscent deploying upon me your face.
    Now, I just lay in my bed
    While images of you linger like a plague.
    Recollected emotions congregate
    My heart thinks it's fate.
    But it's impaired and mistaken
    You expertly promised to be forsaken.
    In my broken heart you shall remain
    Like a miserable permanent rain.
    There's a disturbance not letting me free
    Forever your love will haunt me.

    Submitted on 2004-04-25 15:07:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      cool. your ability to create images is realy good. the line

    Now, I just lay in my bed
    While images of you linger like a plague.

    is really reminicent of someone who suffers depression, just letting themselves waste away.

    i know what it was like to just lye there just thinking about someone hoping that they would just go away. eventually they did.
    it really set me free when images of him just left me alone.

    still watching ;)
    | Posted on 2005-10-21 00:00:00 | by eowyn | [ Reply to This ]
      My heart thinks it's fate.
    But it's impaired and mistaken
    You expertly promised to be forsaken... these words are forever embedded in my heart and mind. i beleive we have some f the same expiriences regarding love and loss. we are both haunted by the past, and the future. its nice to find a kindred soul. i have not read all of your poems yet, but this one for some reason is my favorite so far. words cant describe how you have stired my soul from its rest with your beautiful words of truth and longing. talk to you later, ella
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by stormyskye | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the use of words in this piece and it flows quite well.. overall i really like the feel of the poem.. it is very haunting.. good write :)
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      love your word use how you put together and ya thanxs for your imput on i think rape ends sumwher but i mite be wrong anyway still thanx and great poem
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by gothicgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      on a scale of 1-10, i give this poem a 9, it was a very good write. i think you have a lot of talent. also the word usage was awesome
    | Posted on 2004-04-25 00:00:00 | by slwht | [ Reply to This ]

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