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    dots Submission Name: Nothing Shockingdots
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    Author: brokenroses
    ASL Info:    17/m/indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 191/192/62
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 629
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 561



    Description:
       no real deep metaphors covering the piece, just very straight forward about the woes of society.


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    dotsNothing Shockingdots
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    Is nothing shocking?
    Nothing at all?
    Does a gentle laugh,
    Escape our lips,
    When our fellow bretheren fall?

    Does nothing pain us,
    When it crosses our eyes?
    Does no real compassion,
    Befall our hearts,
    When we see some-body die?

    Does our busy life,
    Make us numb?
    Do we feel no sorrow,
    For all the actions,
    Of the things we have done?

    Our comfortability,
    With our chosen line,
    Will find a way,
    And catch us in time.




    Submitted on 2005-12-10 11:15:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      

    very karmic sentiments, my friend.

    unfortunately growing up simply translates into
    intense de-sensitization

    most people don't care
    simple as that

    which it wasn't really like that

    nice poem

    jonathon
    | Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by huntingjonathon | [ Reply to This ]
      Very true. It's unfortunate that people [and I include myself] can sit and watch all the suffereing without batting an eyelash. I think with all the news coverage today, it's not till we see a major tragedy, like Katrina or 9/11 here in the U.S. before it affects us.

    Peace,

    Joe
    | Posted on 2005-12-10 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      This is true
    I really enjoyed reading this
    In order for the human soul to Heal
    We have to Learn to Forgive Ourselves
    Yes along the path of life we do hurt others
    Some of them no matter how hard we try will never forgive us
    This is when we need to look deep into our selves and realize
    With all our might we have tryed to correct the wrongs we have done
    This was written well
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-10 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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